Talk:Nusreta Sivac

Nusreta Sivac was nominated as a Social sciences and society good article, but it did not meet the good article criteria at the time (April 18, 2013). There are suggestions on the review page for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated.

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GA Review[edit]

This review is transcluded from Talk:Nusreta Sivac/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 14:05, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-5 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 14:05, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"After the camp's closure in August 1992 due to press" -- can this be made more specific (e.g., due to press coverage?)
- Added "coverage".
"Bosniaks and Croats in Prijedor were forced to wear white armbands and had to hang white flags by their houses' windows. They had their houses looted and burned while they were transported to the Keraterm, Omarska, and Trnopolje concentration camps." -- is it possible to source these two sentences from a source also discussing Sivac?
"No memorial exists for the camp's victims while schools there had commemorated the opening day of the nearby Trnopolje camp." -- I'm not sure I understand this sentence-- the schools commemorate it in the sense of celebrating it? or memorializing its victims? Also, what does the phrase "schools there" mean here--at the camp? -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:41, 17 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Clarified as "in Prijedor".
"She is a member of the Women's Association of Bosnia and Herzegovina and is the chairwoman of the Prijedor chapter." -- If this sentence is going to appear in the lead, it should also appear in the article body per WP:LEAD. It would also be helpful to fix a date for her chairwomanship to avoid this potentially going out of date (it's not clear whether she will still be chair in two years, say). -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:54, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Clarified its two organizations. She joined the Women's Association of Bosnia and Herzegovina when she left to Croatia and at some point became president of the Association of Women from Prijedor – Izvor. I'll see if I can dig up specific dates next week and then add the latter organization otherwise I don't know where to place it.

Closing review[edit]

I'm concerned that the language of the article is close enough to its sources, at times, to violate the guideline at WP:PARAPHRASE. This is always a difficult gray area, and one that I struggle with myself, but I think that the phrasing and structure here is close enough to fall outside acceptable guidelines. For example:

Article: "Bosniaks and Croats in Prijedor were forced to wear white armbands and had to hang white flags by their houses' windows. They had their houses looted and burned while they were transported to the Keraterm, Omarska, and Trnopolje concentration camps. Two months after the Bosnian Serb-formed Army of Republika Srpska took control of Prijedor, she was requested to appear at the local police station under the pretense that it was for questioning; however upon arrival she and 25 other women were taken to the Omarska camp. She was amongst 36 other women and 3,500 men that were imprisoned there."
Source: "During that time, Muslims and Croats who constituted other components of the population in Prejidor, were subjected to limited freedom of movement. They were forced to wear white arm bands and to display white flags outside their windows. Houses owned by Muslims and Croats were looted and burned and their owners were taken to concentration camps in Keraterm, Omarska, Prijedor and Trnopolje. Two months after Prijidor was taken, Nusreta was summoned for what she thought would be questioning at the police station, but instead found herself ushered onto a bus escorted by Serb military. It was only when she arrived at the destination that she realised she had been taken into a concentration camp in the mining town of Omarska. Nusreta was one of the 36 women and some 3500 men in the camp. "
Article: "In early August 1992, the camp was visited by the Red Cross and members of the European press, and it was closed immediately after.[4] Five women did not survive the camp.[3] Sivac stated that "four of them were later found in a mass grave and one is still missing.""
Source:"In early August 1992, the Red Cross and European press visited the Omarska concentration camp. It was shut down immediately after. “Five of the women did not survive Omarska,” Nusreta said, “Four of them were later found in a mass grave and one is still missing.”"

For this reason, I'm not listing the article for promotion at this time. However, it does seem to me close to Good Article status in other respects--sourcing, covering "main aspects", neutrality, etc.--so I hope you won't be discouraged by this review. The guideline at WP:PARAPHRASE offers some suggestions for rewriting sections like this that may be helpful; I'd recommend reorganizing and rephrasing this so it is more clearly an original work, even if that means having to drop a few details. And I hope you'll renominate at that point. Thanks for your work on this important figure! -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:17, 18 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]