Talk:One Love (Jennifer Lopez song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Till I Go Home (talk · contribs) 13:55, 5 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• It has been exactly one month since the last review, so I will review it (again) to have the backlog moving.
• First of all, the article is in much better state, and clearly there have been improvements since the last nomination and now.

Issues

• Semi-colon is used incorrectly in the first sentence of the second paragrph (in the lead). Should be just a comma.
• which contains references --> which according to them contains references
• Despite this, critics have noted that Noa is not referenced in the song and the lawsuit never transpired. --> Hmm I read the article and only one critic said that, so maybe change to "one critic noted that Noa is not ..."
• had plans to --> intended to
• Link Epic Records and Sony Music Entertainment
• who loved the idea of the it but thought the track to be "very generic" ...
• ..new verses for the song; --> again semi-colon issue
• Lopez recorded her vocals --> Change Lopez to 'she' because of repetition
• this is unreliable, as was written by a user of the site, not a staff member, thus should be removed
• Sal Cinquemani of Slant Magazine started that beyond --> Hmm shouldn't this be "stated"?
• "The Music Network" in the reception section should be wiki-linked, and in the reference, it should not be in italics
• starting that apart from other songs on Love? --> same as above.
• released a statement saying --> released a statement, saying (for better flow)
• He further started that --> "stated" .. again .. or am I missing something? :S
• I think it would be good to write where the Mohegan Sun is (i.e. Uncasville, Connecticut)
• The credits for the personnel section really do need to be listed, I think that was mentioned in the last review
• New York Times publisher is New York Times Company

Overall

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   On hold for 6-7 days, I don't believe this will take long, thanks.

• I believe all the issues have been addressed. LOL at the "started" issue. I never noticed that until you pointed it out. Statυs ≠ 14:19, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
  • Lol. Passed now. Till I Go Home ^{talk edits} 14:23, 5 June 2012 (UTC)