Talk:People Move On/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Will review this within a week-- Ippantekina (talk) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Lead

• "before starting his solo career" was he part of a band/project before?

McAlmont & Butler – mentioned earlier in the sentence. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Background

• "produced Hopper's sole album" do you mean solo?

Sole – their only album. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

• ", and contemplated what to do with his life, and decided to start a solo career" the first "and" is redundant
• Link demo

Writing and production

• "would like to collaborate Ashcroft" collaborate with
• The wikilink to Makoto Sakamoto is an article about a Japanese athlete. Do you think the wikilink is correct?
• Link mixing
• Link mastering

Composition and lyrics

• "compared to the work of Jeff Buckley, Young, and Wilco" is "Young" here Neil Young?
• "Drawing influences from classic rock from the late 1960s and 1970s, Lucy O'Brien of The Independent wrote" grammar
• "Though Butler has stressed that it isn't a "retro record".[25]" grammar
• Link jargon terms like crescendo and coda

Critical reception

• Link vinyl

I've linked it in the Reissues section instead. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Reception

• The Birmingham Post quote is too long; consider trimming it down

Sources

• There are a lot of harv errors in the sources ("Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation"). Install this script and fix accordingly.

I haven't used the harv template/parameter so I'm not sure why the warning would be coming up at all? MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

I suggest using {{sfn}}. Very useful in guiding which source the ref points to, too. Ippantekina (talk) 08:42, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Added. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Superb. No more harv erros. Ippantekina (talk) 09:01, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Overall

• Putting this  On hold for seven days. Ippantekina (talk) 01:52, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

@Ippantekina: Made most of the changes, but see above for comments. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

@MusicforthePeople: Thank you for addressing the comments. I have one remaining issue with refs/harv. Ippantekina (talk) 08:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

@Ippantekina: Done. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)

Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 09:02, 22 August 2022 (UTC)