Talk:Pokémon Black and White/GA4

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Reviewer: ProtoDrake (talk · contribs) 16:52, 19 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]


Yes, I shall take this review. The very first time I have ever been involved with anything relating to Pokemon, so I can be properly impartial. Expect me to have something for you within the week. --ProtoDrake (talk) 16:52, 19 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Review[edit]

Right, here we go. To start off, the sources are good and the image licenses seem alright. The rest of the articles (fairly minor) issues are mostly formatting and grammar.

Lead

  • "Black and White introduced 156 new Pokémon to the franchise, 5 more than the previous record holder Red and Blue, as well as many new features..." - Red and Blue should be italicized.

Plot

  • "One particular example of this is Castelia City, which served as the region's central metropolis.." - I think it should be "serves" rather than "served", as the rest of the sentence is in present tense when not talking about its inspiration.
  • I've been reverted... ☠ Jaguar ☠ 16:06, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • What do you mean? Did someone tell you to change it to the other way earlier? Tezero (talk) 16:19, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oh no, Ryulong reverted my edit in this diff, hinting it's favourable to leave it in past tense but I don't know which tense to use? ☠ Jaguar ☠ 17:49, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Oh. ...Actually, I think I prefer it in the past tense, since it's referring to the original Black and White's events in Black and White 2. Eh, I'm fine either way; some way just has to be picked. Tezero (talk) 17:53, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I agree, I'm fine with it in past tense too! Maybe Black and White 2 would be more acceptable in present tense, but that being said there is no accurate timeline in any Pokemon generation... ☠ Jaguar ☠ 17:57, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm pretty sure they take place in sequential order. I know Gen 2 takes place after Gen 1, as attributed by people in the game referencing events from three years prior. At the very least, we know B/W2 are sequels to B/W1. Tezero (talk) 18:03, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Definitely, I think Gen 1-2 and B/W1-B/W2 are the only games that actually reference a timeline (X/Y references Gary Oak from Gen 1). ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:26, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Promotion and release

  • For pre-order ticket holders, an alternate-colored Raikou, Entei, or Suicune was available for transfer to their Diamond, Pearl, Platinum, HeartGold, or SoulSilver games. At the theater, players would be able to download a Celebi to the same games. Both of these Pokémon would activate special events in Black and White involving Zoroark and Zorua, respectively." - Is there a reference to back this up?
  • I KNOW I found one earlier, and I thought it was in the article. Wonder what happened to it. Tezero (talk) 17:55, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Don't worry, added appropriate references. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 17:57, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Music

  • "Go Ichinose was in charge of directing all Pokémon voices for the game while Minako Adachi produced all sound effects." - Same as above?
  • Fixed, I think? ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:21, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • I didn't see any reference for the information. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:27, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not to be lazy, but I wonder if that needs a citation. It could easily be found in the game's credits or manual - which I don't happen to have on me at the moment... Tezero (talk) 18:28, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Ah sorry, I thought that this was a copyediting issue. I'll try to find a suitable reference. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:32, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Added two references. I hope these are alright, but I'm thinking that the actual game manual would suffice too. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:36, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

  • "Pokémon Black and White'' have received largely positive reviews by critics..." - Two too many italics on "White".
  • Fixed. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 17:59, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

References

  • Refs 107 and 115 need archiving given the site's recent tendency to be down, and if possible Refs 81 and 107 need filling out a bit with the article author, publication date and such, if possible. Also some name arrangement issues: the author names should really be last-first, and I've seen first-last usage in Refs 32, 48, 55, 56, 106, 112, 115 and 116.
  • Tezero archived ref 107 and 115, and I think I've sorted out the author names in the rest of the references. I'm going to double check if anything needs fleshing out but for now I think that's it? ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:16, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

And.. that's it really. That's everything. When these issues are resolved or adequately explained, the article can pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 17:40, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Right, all issues have been resolved, and as a second look-over doesn't show anything, I'll rank this as a Pass. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:39, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review ProtoDrake! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:41, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
You're welcome. By the way, could either of you look at the Lightning FAC if you want to? It's got one support so far. I don't mean to sound like we're exchanging favors, but I don't want Lightning's FAC to go the same way as the Squall Leonhart one. --ProtoDrake (talk) 18:43, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Sure, I've got another FAC to look at so I'll leave some comments down on both of them tomorrow morning. It's always annoying when FACs get closed due to inactivity. ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:47, 22 October 2014 (UTC)[reply]
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