Talk:Rasiklal Parikh

Copy editing

@Gog the Mild: Hi, just published this one. Need copy editing. Thanx in advance. --Gazal world (talk) 21:52, 24 February 2018 (UTC)

@Gazal world: I have made a start. What a good and well referenced article.

• I felt that it was overlinked, see MOS:OLINK. It is always difficult to pick out just what the key links are, so feel free to change my decisions.
• "and indulged towards Vedas and Sanskrit literature". What does "indulged" mean here. I am guessing that it means that he had a personal preference, but I am not sure.
• " At the same time he met Indulal Yagnik, a leader and activist". A leader of or in what?
• What is Kavyaprakasha? (Poem, prose, novel, tract, etc?)
• Is there a reason why in "Vedas and Brahmana" Brahmana is linked and Vedas not?
• Pahelo Class (1931) and Premnu Mulya (1950) are his translated plays from other language". From which language(s)?
• "He delivered the Maharaja Sayajirao Lectures Series at M S University." In which year did he do this?
• What is "applied criticism"? I have not heard of this and a quick Google search shows no results, so I think that a brief explanation for the reader would be helpful.
• " Rasiklal studied Dalpat Pingal (Lit. Dalpatram's book on Gujarati prosody) in seventh standard from his teacher." I don't understand the part in italics.
• The lead needs another paragraph or possibly two. I am happy to write it, but assume that you would prefer to.

That's from my first quick run through. I will come back in a day or two with fresh eyes, and brain, and go through again; and incorporate any answers to the queries above. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:00, 25 February 2018 (UTC)

In the infobox he is listed as an archeologist. There is no mention of this in the article. I think that you need to either remove this from the infobox (which would be my preference) or add some detail of his notable archeological activities to the article. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:04, 25 February 2018 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: Hi Gog, thanks for your analysis of article and copy editing.

• "and indulged towards Vedas and Sanskrit literature" means, Rasiklal studied both Vedas and Sanskrit literature under Abhyankar Shastri and was influenced by Abhyankar Shastri. Thus, he was entered in the field of Vedas and Sanskrit literature.
• Indulal Yagnik was a political leader and Indian independence activist.
• Kavyaprakasha is theoretical works by Mammata (related to Indian poetics and theories)
• Brahmana is linked and Vedas not? : Vedas in already linked in Life section.
• Pahelo Class (1931) and Premnu Mulya (1950) are his translated plays from other language": I do not know about source language. 'll research on it.
• He delivered the Maharaja Sayajirao Lectures Series at M S University." In which year did he do this?: I do no know the year. 'll check from sources.
• What is "applied criticism"?: 'applied criticism' is opposite of theoretical criticism. It is analysis, interpretation, and evaluation of particular works and writings. We can define it as a 'practical criticism' which deals directly with particular book, novel, story, poem etc.
• " Rasiklal studied Dalpat Pingal (Lit. Dalpatram's book on Gujarati prosody) in seventh standard from his teacher." I don't understand the part in italics: Dalpat pingal (Dalpat = Dalpatram and pingal= a Gujarati word for prosody, metres of poetry). Dalpat pingal is a famous book based on Gujarati prosody written by Dalpatram.
• 'll rewrite the lead section as you suggested.

Is there any other problem? Please feel free to ask me. Once again thank you. --Gazal world (talk) 12:49, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for that, very helpful. Apologies for missing the first link.

" Rasiklal studied Dalpat Pingal (Lit. Dalpatram's book on Gujarati prosody) in seventh standard from his teacher." I don't understand the part in italics: Dalpat pingal (Dalpat = Dalpatram and pingal= a Gujarati word for prosody, metres of poetry). Dalpat pingal is a famous book based on Gujarati prosody written by Dalpatram. My query was on in seventh standard from his teacher, which you haven't addressed. More tomorrow. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:31, 26 February 2018 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: It means Rasiklal studied 'Dalpat pingal' (a book of prosody written by Dalpatram) in 7th standard. He studied this book in 7th standard under his school teacher. Have a good day. --Gazal world (talk) 00:46, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

@Gazal world: Thank you. I understand now. See what you think of my change. Feel free to criticise if you are not happy. I think that I am finished.

Issues outstanding:

• In the infobox he is listed as an archeologist. There is no mention of this in the article. I think that you need to either remove this from the infobox (which would be my preference) or add some detail of his notable archeological activities to the article.
• "Pahelo Class (1931) and Premnu Mulya (1950) are his translated plays from other language": From which language(s)? I do not know about source language. 'll research on it.

If you wanted to improve this really good article further you could:

• Put a date of first publication next to every work mentioned.
• Move "Rasiklal studied Dalpatram's book on Gujarati prosody, Dalpat Pingal, while at school." to the section dealing with Parikh's education.

I hope that this helps. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:40, 27 February 2018 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: Hello Gog. Sorry for late reply. For now, I have removed 'archaeologist' from article. Eager to work on Shikwa and Jawab e Shikwa. Thank you. Gazal world (talk) 18:57, 12 March 2018 (UTC)