Talk:Sandcastles in the Sand (song)/GA1
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 12:38, 17 April 2019 (UTC)
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Lead[edit]
- was inspired by many 1980s pop ballads → "several" may be a better choice here
- The song was available for streaming → The song was made available for streaming
- Link "single"
- We need information about the song's genres and composition in the lead
- was shot at Zuma Beach, California. The video featured → was shot at Zuma Beach, California, featuring (to avoid clipped and short sentences)
- praised its humor → praised the song's humor (so that we know it's not about the video)
Infobox[edit]
- We need alt text for the cover artwork
- The "Recorded" and "Genre" parametres are not cited throughout the article's body
- I removed the Recorded bit and changed the Genre to pop ballad. Damian Vo (talk) 11:16, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
Background and recording[edit]
- Smulders was happy → Smulders was pleased (to be more encyclopedic)
- from many 1980s pop ballads → See the lead
- "Toy Soldiers" (1989).[13][7] → refs need to be in chronlogical order
- where she recorded with normal vocals → what are "normal vocals"?
- No need to link "green apple"
- who lead a rock band → who led a rock band
- Link "rock"
- Robin said their relationship lasts a "whole summer" in Canada, which she explains is only the last week of July → I don't get the meaning of this sentence and why is it in present tense?
Composition[edit]
- with a runtime of 3:33 → with a runtime of 3 minutes and 33 seconds
- obviously-written-by-a-16-year-old" ballad.[27][10][28] → refs not innchronological order
- of Entertainment Weekly felt that it is a → of Entertainment Weekly felt that it was a
- noted the similarities from the song to Gibson's power ballad → noted similarities between the song and Gibson's power ballad
Music video[edit]
- lip-synching the lyrics → lip-synching to the lyrics
- The image is kind of big; try 250 px instead
- Great work here otherwise
Release[edit]
- The song was fully available → The song was fully made available
Reception[edit]
- placed it in a tie for fourth among → ranked it in a tie for fourth place among
- a great example of offline media understanding and incorporating online video → this sentence is gramatically incorrect
Later appearances[edit]
- This section is kind of rendundant and should be deleted alltogether. You're talking about the later 'career' of Robin Sparkles, but that's nothing about "Sandcastles in the Sand" itself and nothing that would fit into this article thus
Release history[edit]
- Everything is fine
Notes[edit]
- Also link the note in the infobox, next to the artist's name
- Added.
Other things[edit]
- 24.8% is a great copyviolation percentage
- No dead links
- As far as I checked them, the references do support the assertions made in this article
Outcome[edit]
On hold for 7 days — a very interesting article that needs a few fixed before it can be passed to GA status. Good luck and greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:58, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I resolved everything you mentioned above. Look forward to your comments. Damian Vo (talk) 11:16, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Damian Vo: Passing — Wow, that was fast
... After I had a second look on this, I decided to pass it to GA as everything has been adressed. Congrats! Is there any possiblity for you to review one of my GANs? Just disregard if you're too busy... Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:34, 18 April 2019 (UTC)
- @Damian Vo: Passing — Wow, that was fast
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.