Talk:Sawmill Fire (2017)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:59, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at this article! — GhostRiver 21:59, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• "and then to extinguish"
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 23:56, 2 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Footage of the fire's inception was released by the U.S. Forest Service at the request of a local news agency in November 2018, resulting in its causation being mocked online." → "When the U.S. Forest Service released footage of the fire's inception in November 2018 at the request of a local news agency, the cause of the Sawmill Fire was subject to online mockery."
  •  Done I've also moved this sentence after the next one. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 23:56, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Cause

• To clarify, is the property owned by the state of Arizona, or by Arizona State University? If the former, as I suspect, then I would suggest saying "a state-owned property in south-central Arizona"
  •  Added Indeed, the former is what I meant. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 00:10, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "but was unable to because of the speed at which it was spreading." → "but the speed at which it spread rendered his attempts unsuccessful."
  •  Done Sorta. I changed it to "but was unsuccessful because of the speed at which it was spreading." –♠Vami_IV†♠ 00:10, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Fire

• "and precipitation was abnormally low for the region"
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "and had been closed on April 24" → "and had been closed earlier that day"
  •  Done –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "repairs to the road, meanwhile, lasted until early May"
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Wind as high as 45 miles per hour (72 km/h) was expected" → "Winds as high as 45 miles per hour (72 km/h) were expected"
  •  Fixed Don't know how I missed that one. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "by 30 April" → "by April 30"
  •  Fixed Whoops. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:14, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Aftermath

• WL U.S. Attorney's Office
•  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "though the fire started on property of the State of Arizona, Federal property had been burned." → "although the fire started on property of the State of Arizona, federal property had also been burned."
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "and was summoned to appear"
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "on 29 September" → "on September 29"
  •  Fixed –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "in Dickey and gender reveal parties in general" → "in both Dickey and the concept of gender reveal parties"
  •  Done –♠Vami_IV†♠
• I would say "the first wildfire known to be ignited by a gender reveal party"
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• "igniting more public outrage" → "which ignited more public outrage"
  •  Done –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:16, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

References

• "azcentral" → "The Arizona Republic" with WL in [16] and [43]
  •  Done –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:18, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
• Add "|url-access=limited" parameter to NYT (3), WaPo (39), and Forbes (42)
  •  Added –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:18, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

General comments

• No stability concerns are present in the revision history
• One picture (map) that is in the public domain and is relevant to the article
• Earwig score is good at 9.9%

Putting on hold now, ping me if there are any questions. — GhostRiver 23:25, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: Addressed the above. I've since writing the article acquired some more materials for #Aftermath about, well, the aftermath of the fire. Should I add them in now or would you like for me to refrain for now, and keep this review short? –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:22, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

@Vami IV: The article is is short enough that I wouldn't mind if you added them in and then I can take a quick look! — GhostRiver 13:35, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: OK, done, and all in one revision. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:38, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

@Vami IV: All the new stuff looks great, happy to pass now! — GhostRiver 14:59, 4 September 2021 (UTC)