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Sorry, all of a sudden I'm swamped with real life work and too busy to review this today. I'll get to it tomorrow-- Sorry! Eddie891TalkWork 22:29, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Feel free to take as long as you need to. I'm on the opposite end of the spectrum: I was put on quarantine today, so I have way too much time on my hands. Hog FarmBacon 22:39, 8 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
"the two main objectives" Given that you don't specify what the two main objectives were, maybe just "main objectives"?
Done
"drove in his skirmishers" What does 'drove in' mean here?
Does "drove back" make more sense here?
"did begin pursuit until October 30" think something's missing here?
Two words missing and a wrong tense
"it continued until the Arkansas River was reached" can you rephrase to eliminate 'was reached'? Maybe 'they reached the AR'?
Done
"Price has lost" perhaps just "had lost" or even "lost"
Went with had. Typo
"1864 United States Presidential Election" we generally capitalize it "presidential election" afaik
Done. Wasn't quite sure which was right.
"who promoted ending the war" -> "favored ending the war"?
Done
"General Edmund Kirby Smith, commander of the Trans-Mississippi Department," I don't consider it immediately clear what side Smith is on
Added that he was Confederate.
"effect as the proposed transfer of troops" and what was that?
Clarified
"aid McClellan's chance of defeating Lincoln" add "in the election"?
Added
"ting Lincoln; on September 19" Suggest splitting instead of semicolon-ing here
Split
"Jefferson City, a secondary target" II think you can re-link here
Added, although I wouldn't be surprised if someone blindly wielding AWB will nix it by year's end.
"to strong to attack in early October" wrong too, I think, and it's unclear if you mean "too strong to attack in October" or "in october they decided taht it was too strong to attack"
Yeah, it's the wrong too, I'm terrible with to/too and their/there/they're. And yep, its unclear later, so I've added a few more words to clarify.
"By October 23, Union Major General Samuel R. Curtis and the Army of the Border caught" I think you need to either cut the by (and replace with On) or add "had caught up"
Went with on to lead off, as it conveys a more exact meaning that using by
withdraw after being "badly cut up" who are you quoting here
Good thing you brought this up. In looking in the sources to determine who the quote is from, I found that I had a few page numbers wrong. Quoting Curtis, attributed.
"November 8 at the Arkansas." Is this right?
Yes. Is there a phrasing issue here that makes it read weird? I can rephrase this if need be.
my bad...
That's a first pass. Comments are suggestions as always, open to discusssion. Very nice work. Eddie891TalkWork 21:47, 10 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Eddie891: - All these initial ones responded to. My goal is to make this campaign a good topic, there's a ton of work yet. Sadly, I don't think there's much chance to take many of these above GA. I've got Marais des Cygnes at ACR, but I'm not sure that the sourcing would let it get to FAC. Sourcing for some of these makes me feel like Price trying to win these battles: trying to make bricks out of largely nonexistent and low-quality straw. Hog FarmBacon 23:14, 10 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
If anyone can do it, my money's on you :P I've had the opposite problem with my projects recently-- James Oglethorpe and O Captain! My Captain! all have wayyy too much information for my short attention span and painfully empty pockets. Eddie891TalkWork 13:40, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Eddie891: - Don't mean to bug you, but is there much else? Tomorrow's my last day on quarantine, so life will be a bit busier for me after that. Hog FarmBacon 04:14, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Actually looks quite good by now, other checks follow:
