Talk:Silly Boy Blue/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Here is another review for you! --K. Peake 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Thanks for reviewing Kyle. I'll be able to get to this on Sunday probably. I have a busy next few days. Cheers friend :-) – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 02:30, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Good news there, especially with Sunday being my only remaining day off work! --K. Peake 06:14, 8 April 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Pipe demoed to Demo (music)
• "with a new lyric and arrangement" → "with new lyrics"

• Both done

• "has appeared on compilations." → "has appeared on releases."

• Feel like compilations is more specific and 'releases' is too generic. Added link here. – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

• "and during two of his" → "and during his respective"
• Pipe acoustically to Acoustic music

• Both done

• "and was included on" → "and was included on the compilation album" with the wikilink

• See above

• "while Bowie revisited Tibetan themes" → "whereas Bowie revisited the Tibetan themes"
• "performed this arrangement in New York in" → "performed this version at New York's Carnegie Hall in" with the wikilink
• "saw official release" → "saw an official release"

• Above three done

Recording and composition

• Retitle to Background and composition
• First para looks good!
• Wikilink Tibet on the quote box
• "A year later, he" → "In 1966, Bowie" per this being a new para
• Wikilink Decca Studios
• Pipe key to Key (music)
• "Bowie rewrote its lyrics" → "Bowie rewrote the lyrics"
• Wikilink cello
• "on backing vocals." → "on her vocals."
• Pipe baseline to Bassline
• Mention the release year of the version of Bob Dylan's recording

• All done

• Are you sure that "resolving" is the appropriate term here?

• How about 'ending'? – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

Release and aftermath

• "Silly Boy Blue" is sequenced as the second track, so alter this error appropriately

• Well that's extra embarrassing, fixed – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

• "considered it one of" → "considered the track one of"
• "He ultimately felt" → "Unterberger ultimately felt"
• "again at London's Decca Studios," → "again at Decca Studios," per the studio's location already having been mentioned
• Add the release year of "Waiting for the Man"
• Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
• Pipe mime to Mime artist
• "and 13 May 1968." → "and 13 May 1968, respectively."

• All done

Toy version

• "other tracks Bowie wrote" → "other tracks he wrote" to avoid overusage of Bowie
• "so to prevent" → "as so to prevent"
• "this new version is" → "the new version is"
• "of "Silly Boy Blue" at the" → "of "Silly Boy Blue" for the" to avoid overusage of at
• "arguing that its" → "arguing that a"

• All done

Personnel

• Any note(s) that could be added from the unknown musicians?

• Unfortunately nope. Many of the session musicians from this period were undocumented. – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

References

• Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 8.3%!!!!

• Ayyyyyyy

• WP:OVERLINK of Rolling Stone on ref 22
• WP:OVERLINK of The Guardian on ref 33

• Both done

Sources

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 11:05, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Kyle Peake All set. Sorry almost completely forgot about this. Thanks again Kyle. – zmbro _{(talk) (cont)} 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, I was thinking yesterday where was your response but I am very glad to see it by now! --K. Peake 06:31, 11 April 2022 (UTC)