Talk:Super Bowl commercials/GA2

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 13:36, 21 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]

General comments[edit]

  • See MOS:'S.
  • Lead section looks good.
  • In #Benefits: "The popularity [...] have also" → "The popularity [...] has also"
  • Is the usage of "US$" and "USD" necessary for this article? (found in #Cost)
  • "In order to" → "To"
This should be changed for all uses to avoid wordy sentences.
 Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:44, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
This should also be changed for all uses.
 Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:46, 13 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "all-time" → "all time" (change all uses)
    •  Done Fixed all except for the first reference, where the usage of the hyphen is appropriate since it is an adjective of the word "viewership" and comes before the word. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:56, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "ad equated" → "adequated"
    •  Done "ad equated" made sense in the context but was a little unclear, so I changed the phrasing to "The narration of the ad likened the emergence from the crisis to the second half of a football game[...]" (emphasis added) JParksT2023 (talk) 15:10, 29 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • In #Local_advertising, try avoiding the repetitive "In [year], [event]".
  • The phrase "only of the" doesn't sound right.
  • Remove the comma after "abortion or Christianity".
  • Add a serial comma after "MoveOn.org".
  • "sponsor the NFL" → "sponsor of the NFL"
References
  • adage.com → Ad Age
  • Deadline → Deadline Hollywood
  • Forbes.com → Forbes
  • NYTimes.com → The New York Times
  • Time.com → Time
  • TV By The Numbers → TV by the Numbers
  • Wall Street Journal → The Wall Street Journal
  • Are publisher parameters needed if they are the same as the website?
  • The link to #22 might be dead (from Sports Business Journal).
  • Citations #41 and #42 do not currently exist ("invoked but never defined").
    •  Done I just removed them, since I don't know what source was being used and there was already another source there. JParksT2023 (talk) 14:12, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Same issues for #49, #117, #196, #197, #198, #226, and #238.
  • Citations #65, #73, #166, #208, #245, and #249 are missing their website parameters.
  • #128 is missing several parameters (date/author/access-date).
  • #153 has an error with its URL and citation.
  • Properly cite #223 and #224.
    • Did you mean #222 and #223? #224 looks fine.
I think you removed a reference; now the numbers don't match but yes, #222 and #223.
 Done JParksT2023 (talk) 15:02, 3 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • New York Post is not reliable per WP:NYPOST (remove it).
  • Mark citations from Adweek / Advertising Age with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark citations from Bloomberg with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark citations from Chicago Tribune with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Financial Post with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Financial Times with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark citations from Forbes with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Fortune with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark citations from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from San Francisco Chronicle with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Time with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from The Wall Street Journal with "|url-access=subscription".
  • Mark citations from Vanity Fair with "|url-access=limited".
  • Mark citations from Washington Post with "|url-access=limited".
  • Don't use the "Archived [...] at the Wayback Machine" template.
    • Where is this used?
Currently at #19, #21, #22, #108, #110, and #152.
 Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Also replace the "(subscription required)" template for "|url-access=subscription".
    • Where is this used?
Reference #155.
 Done JParksT2023 (talk) 14:55, 6 May 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • Mark citations from Sports Business Journal with "|url-access=registration".
  • Archive references (might have to do it manually).

Progress[edit]

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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