Talk:The Calculus Affair/GA1

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 10:03, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Happy to offer a review. Josh Milburn (talk) 10:03, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Hergé continued The Adventures of Tintin with The Red Sea Sharks, while the series itself became a defining part of the Franco-Belgian comics tradition." How about "Hergé continued The Adventures of Tintin with The Red Sea Sharks, and the series as a whole became a defining part of the Franco-Belgian comics tradition." The "while" seems to suggest a temporal relationship
Done. Changed as asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Critically well-received, various commentators" Various commentators were critically well-received?
Done. Changed as asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "conference in nuclear physics" Aren't conferences on topics rather than in them?
Done. Changed as asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • " further echoing the fact that espionage thrillers were proving popular in France and Belgium." I'm not clear what you mean by "further echoing", here.
    • I've changed this to "also being published at a time in which" Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:46, 28 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • I think the Background section is a little light; it seems to skip over key information including the original publication format/location. When you say "Started in December 1954", do you mean the writing process or the publication? [Sorry, I see now that this information is in a separate section- I still think a little more context could be provided.]
Done. Tweaked the "Started in December 1954" part.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is L'Écho illustré worth a link? Also, is that a publisher or a periodical?
    • It was a magazine; the term "publisher" is used here to explain that it was this magazine which published The Adventures of Tintin in Switzerland. I've re-worded this to better reflect the situation. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:42, 28 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • You need a citation for the quote in the image caption- quotes should never go unreferenced!
Done. As asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "They were critical about the inclusion" I think you mean critical of
Done. Changed as asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "preceding two-part moon adventure" Links?
Done. Linked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "believed that The Calculus Affair aptly illustrates how Tintin is no longer political in the manner that he was in early works like" The tense shift is very jarring here
Done. Changed as asked.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • It's not clear to me what the source of File:Hotel Cornavin.jpg. Other images might raise some eyebrows at FAC, but I'm not going to kick up a fuss here.
  • The sources are great. I note that you twice link Peeters's name in the bibliography but only link Farr's once. Consistency would be good!
Done. Delinked second instance of Peeters link.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 15:08, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Methuen is not mentioned outside of the infobox/categories. Also, do we have a category for Casterman?
    • I don't know if we have any reliable sources that actively say that the first English-language translation was published in 1960 by Methuen, but this information can be ascertained by consulting the opening pages of the volume. That being the case, I'm not entirely sure what to do here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 09:56, 28 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Great stuff, as ever. Josh Milburn (talk) 10:52, 27 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Josh, it's appreciated. Is there anything else that you feel needs addressing at this stage in the article's development? Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:16, 29 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Judging from the Commons user's other uploads, they are the author of the hotel image, so I'm willing to let that slide. I'm satisfied with your responses, so I'll promote this now. An engaging read. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:29, 29 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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