Talk:The Hounds of Baskerville/GA1
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 02:38, 10 May 2012 (UTC)
Lede: Link 'second series'Lede: "who also portrays Mycroft Holmes in the series, Sherlock's brother," -> "who also portrays Mycroft Holmes, Sherlock's brother in the series."Lede: "Gatiss felt a greater… than he does" Make sure the tenses match; I'd use pastLede: "The episodes provided an example of how the series is not afraid to tackle the most famous stories" Add 'even' before 'most'Lede: "After its broadcast on BBC One, the episode was given consolidated figures of 10.266 million viewers in the United Kingdom, although a slight drop from the previous episode, was still the second largest audiences in British television the week it aired." Break into two -> "After its broadcast on BBC One, the episode was given consolidated figures of 10.266 million viewers in the United Kingdom. This rating, although a slight drop from the previous episode, was still the second largest audiences in British television the week it aired."- Plot: "Sherlock reacts with anger, denying that there can be anything wrong with him" -> Do you mean to say: "Sherlock reacts with anger, denying that there cannot be anything wrong with him"
Plot: Why is there a minefield in this city? :P
Casting: "In June 2011 it was announced that Russell Tovey will appear on Sherlock series two in its second episode." Change 'will' to 'would'Casting: "said of the experience;" I believe the semi-colon should just be a colonWriting: "as it was written after Doyle killed off the character and as a result was well sold." Which character was killed off?Writing: "Gatiss observes that Conan Doyle's tiredness of the character…" change present to past, i.e. observedWriting: "The three series two episode, respectively centres on Sherlock deal with love, fear, and death" -> "The other episodes of series two, respectively centre on Sherlock dealing with love, fear, and death"
Writing: "Freeman stated that when he sees the hound, Sherlock becomes "really terrified" and for some time stops trusting the evidence he sees" -> "Freeman stated that when Sherlock saw the hound, he became "really terrified" and, for some time, stopped trusting the evidence he saw"Writing: "The episode is an example of how the series is not afraid to tackle the most famous stories" Add 'even' in there and move it up to the part where you're taking about the actual novel and how famous it is
Plot/Reception: I would move the picture for the plot down into the reception areaCritical Reception: "He praises the two lead actors…" -> "He praised the two lead actors"Critical Reception: "favorably compares" -> "favorably compared"Critical Reception: "Chris Tilly of IGN rated the episode a "good" 7 out of 10, stating" -> "Chris Tilly of IGN rated the episode a "good" 7 out of 10, but stated"- References: No. 4 (TV Tropes) is not a reliable reference
On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 15:37, 14 May 2012 (UTC)