Talk:The Smeezingtons/GA2

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:48, 7 October 2014 (UTC)

Will leave some initial comments within 48 hours. I mainly focus on copyediting issues. Thanks! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 21:48, 7 October 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

Lead

• "including the ASCAP Pop Music Awards for Songwriters Ari Levine (from The Smeezingtons)" - somewhat confusing. Delete "from the Smeezingtons"?
• "and the 2011 ASCAP Rhythm & Soul Music Awards for "Nothin' On You" as Top Rap Song" - the Top Rap Song?
• Other than that the lead summarises the article well, complying per WP:LEAD and meeting the GA criteria

The issues raised have been adressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:35, 10 October 2014 (UTC)

Formation and early works

• "He said that upon moving to L.A" - abbreviations should begin with their full name (Los Angeles)
• "He said that upon moving to L.A. he was " - syntax error
• "In 2008, Lawrence was an under-appreciated Los Angeles artist, Mars a struggling singer-songwriter - why was he under-appreciated? Sounds like original research
• "They ventured into the US market," - should be U.S. (assuming this article uses American Spelling)

Notable collaborations

• "The Smeezingtons quickly landed the singles " - this shouldn't be in bold
• Be careful of overlinking in this section. "...became another successful song for The Smeezingtons, reaching No. 1 in the United Kingdom" - United Kingdom is already linked in this section

These issues raised have been addressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:44, 10 October 2014 (UTC)

Influences and style

• "In an article by American Songwriter" - should be italicised

Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:53, 10 October 2014 (UTC)

References

The tool server is currently down so I had to check the references manually. They all seem to be working and I couldn't find any that seemed unreliable, so this meets the GA criteria.

On hold

This is a well written article, worthy of becoming GA. The only things standing in the way of it becoming GA are those copyediting and syntax issues I had mentioned above. The references appear fine and everything else almost meets the GA criteria. I'll put this on hold for seven days until those issues have been addressed. Thanks, ☠ Jaguar ☠ 13:08, 9 October 2014 (UTC)

Close - promoted

After seeing the improvements made to this article I think it now meets the GA criteria. It is overall well written, engaging and comprehensive. Long story short it is now a GA. Well done! ☠ Jaguar ☠ 18:22, 11 October 2014 (UTC)

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