Talk:Tyler Lockett/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sp33dyphil (talk · contribs) 05:09, 27 December 2011 (UTC)

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• Sorry for my ignorance, but what's a "true freshman"?
  • Now linked on first use.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:20, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• Repetitive use of he in the first paragraph of "High school".
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:35, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "to also win the [...] that sport as well." BTW, there's a typo.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:56, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• Is there a MoS convention that says third should be used instead of 3rd?
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:36, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "4 four receptions for 50 yards, 3 three rushes for 9 nine yards, 1 one kickoff return for 10 ten yards and 2 two punt returns" Per WP:ORDINAL; please check throughout the article for consistency.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:01, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Through October 8" why's the first word capitalised?
  • fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:38, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "On October 15, things started to turn around. He posted a 100-yard return of a kickoff for a touchdown on October 15 against Texas Tech." --> "Things started to turn around on October 15, when Lockett posted a 100-yard return of a kickoff for a touchdown against Texas Tech."
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:40, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Player of the week", why's Player capitalised when week isn't? Same with "Offensive freshman of the year".
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:03, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• MoS convention calls for "[month] [day], [year]," constructions, so please add commas where necessary.
  • I have reworked the paragraph to make it clear that the year is 2011. Month and day is properly used throughout with the changes.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:12, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• What's "a consensus All-American"?
  • The term consensus is linked upon its first usage.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:44, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• "Tyler's mother is Nicole Lockett.[31] His father, Kevin who played..." --> "Tyler was born to Nicole and Kevin Lockett who, having played at K-State from 1993 to 1996, is the school's all-time leading receiver. His uncle, Aaron who played at K-State from 1998 to 2001, is their fourth all-time leading receiver as well as their second all-time leading punt returner."
  • Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:47, 27 December 2011 (UTC)
• FN 23 is missing the retrieval date.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:49, 27 December 2011 (UTC)