Talk:Young Americans (song)/GA1
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:51, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
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Like you suggested, I will wipe out another one of these GANs! --K. Peake 20:51, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
Infobox and lead[edit]
- Philadelphia soul should be capitalised in the infobox
- done
- Shouldn't the release part be moved to the sentence after comp in the first para but the mention of the ninth album kept here?
- Do song and album articles have different layouts they're supposed to follow? I think that might be what's going on here (did the same thing for "Ashes"). I think I've been following the album style (like it's laid out here) for all of these. I changed it. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 22:29, 12 January 2023 (UTC)
- Move the comp and lyrics sentence to being the one after the contributions sentence
- "It was recorded in" → "It was mostly recorded in" because some recording was done in November
- "and made its live debut on" → "and was debuted on"
- "It featured contributions from" → "The song featured contributions from"
- above four done
- I would recommend starting the second para with a mention of the reception the song received
- The second highest part is not mentioned in the body, only that it was his second track to reach the top 40
- "retiring it following the" → "before retiring it after the"
- done
Overview[edit]
Music and lyrics[edit]
- First para looks good!
- Wikilink song structure
- "a breakdown, and two" → "a breakdown and two"
- "together through the use of" → "together through the usage of" to be less repetitive
- above three done
- Would [The song] be more appropriate on the quote box?
- yep, done
- "sense of possibility."" → "sense of possibility"." per MOS:QUOTE
- done
- President should be capitalised and mention the years he was in that position from
- Pipe civil rights to Civil and political rights
- Is the full-stop needed after the brackets close since a question mark is used there anyway?
- "with former Beatle" → "with former band member"
- above three done
Recording[edit]
- Img looks good!
- First para looks good!
- "eagerly added by Bowie" I'm not sure if this is grammatically correct, coming after the "built them" part
- "In September 2009, take three," → "In September 2009, take three of the song,"
- done
Release and promotion[edit]
- Pipe the Soul Tour to Diamond Dogs Tour on the img text
- done
- "and was a regular" → "and the song was a regular"
- "now the upcoming album's" → "the then-upcoming album's"
- "was Bowie's cover of" → "was Bowie's 1974 cover of"
- good needed clarification
- Pipe "Knock on Wood" to Knock on Wood (David Bowie song) per MOS:LINK2SECT
- above three done
- "was a breakthrough in America," → "was a breakthrough in the United States," also, mention it was his second highest charting single directly
- yep got it
Critical reception[edit]
- "received positive reviews from" → "was met with positive reviews from"
- done
- Either mention the review was from a writer or the staff of Cash Box
- "so much graffiti."" → "so much graffiti"." per MOS:QUOTE
- "named it one of" → "named the song one of"
- "and American soul."" → "and American soul"."
- Wikilink NME
- "the seventh best single of the year." → "the seventh best single of 1975."
- "by some of the lyrics," → "by certain lyrics,"
- "to Bowie's wife Angie." → "to David's wife Angie Bowie." per MOS:SAMESURNAME
- above seven done
Legacy[edit]
- Wikilink live album
- done
- Second para looks good!
Retrospective appraisal[edit]
- Quote box looks good!
- "to soul music, and his" → "to soul music and his"
- done
- "later commented that "a white" → "later commented, "A white"
- done, removed the later
- Why is later used for two sentences in a row?
- see above
- (update link) should not be in prose; remove it and make an update if you need to
- now that's extra embarrassing. Made the adjustment
- Remove (no order) since The Telegraph comes before any ordered rankings
- "The former argued it" → "The former argued the song"
- "on its list of the 1001 greatest songs to download right now!" → "on its list "The 1001 greatest songs to download right now!""
- above three done
- Where is the number 481 ranking sourced?
Covers and appearances in media[edit]
- Pipe end credits to Closing credits
- In the last sentence, [11] should be solely invoked at the end
- both done
Personnel[edit]
- Good
Charts[edit]
- Why is IFOP included here?
- removed
Notes[edit]
- Good
References[edit]
- Copyvio score looks great at 21.3%!!!
- Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 3 instead of ref 26
- Cite NBC News as publisher instead on ref 6
- WP:OVERLINK of Ultimate Classic Rock on ref 14
- Ref 22 needs to be properly filled in
- Remove pipe on Billboard for ref 29
- Author-link Stephen Thomas Erlewine solely on ref 39
- all done
Sources[edit]
- Wikilink Virgin Books
- done
Final comments and verdict[edit]
- On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:17, 12 January 2023 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Should be good to go on this one unless there's any other outstanding things. Thanks for reviewing. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 22:29, 12 January 2023 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, no issues were left apart from the regular part of promo, though I copyedited that and a few other mistakes! --K. Peake 07:52, 13 January 2023 (UTC)