Template:Did you know nominations/Alysa Liu

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 19 July 2018 (UTC)

Alysa Liu

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• ... that despite earning the 2nd-highest score in the 2018 U.S. Championships, 12-year old Alysa Liu was ineligible to compete at the 2018 World Junior Figure Skating Championships because she was too young? Source: [1]; [2])
  • ALT1:... that Alysa Liu won a gold medal at the 2018 U.S. Figure Skating Championships by over 18 points and earned the 2nd highest-ever score in the junior level? Source: [3]

• Reviewed: Alex Adams (Holby City)

Created by Figureskatingfan (talk). Self-nominated at 04:39, 4 July 2018 (UTC).

• Article is new enough, long enough, neutral and well referenced. I like ALT0, which is verified with inline refs, but it's a bit too wordy IMO. How about:

• ALT0a ... that despite earning the 2nd-highest score in the 2018 U.S. Championships, Alysa Liu was too young to compete at the World Junior Figure Skating Championships?

There's also some close paraphrasing issue such as "were conceived through anonymous egg donors and surrogate mothers". See Earwig report. -Zanhe (talk) 00:30, 10 July 2018 (UTC)

I'm fine with the revised hook. Fixed the close paraphrasing problems. Thanks for the review. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 03:00, 10 July 2018 (UTC)

There are still some paraphrasing issues. I fixed a couple of sentences, but please fix this: "in the second half of the program, including triple lutz-triple toe and triple flip-loop-triple salchow combinations". -Zanhe (talk) 07:06, 10 July 2018 (UTC)

Fixed above sentence. Thanks for the help; this is the first FS article I've created, and much of the language describing things in the sport are jargon. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 17:35, 10 July 2018 (UTC)

I know, technical terms are the hardest to paraphrase. When I write scientists' biographies I often have to omit their major research projects because I can't paraphrase some of the lengthy and precise scientific phrases. Thanks for taking care of the issues. Good to go. -Zanhe (talk) 23:01, 10 July 2018 (UTC)