Template:Did you know nominations/Bemis, Tennessee
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:15, 1 August 2014 (UTC)
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Bemis, Tennessee[edit]
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that after building Bemis, Tennessee, as a company town for its cotton mill workers, the Bemis Company offered transportation services for employees who didn't live there?
- ALT1:... that the designer of the company town of Bemis, Tennessee tried to make the community look like it had grown over time?
- Reviewed: Purabá de Santa Bárbara
Created by Orlady (talk). Self nominated at 03:32, 30 July 2014 (UTC).
Article is new enough (created July 27), long enough, uses in-line citations and appears neutral. The original hook is cited to this source, but, unless I missed it, the source doesn't say that the company provided the referenced train and jitney service, just that such service existed. In any event, I think the alt 1 hook is superior, and it is supported by the same source. My only quibble is with the term "grown up" as applied to the growth of a city. It strikes me as overly colloquial; wouldn't "grown" without "up" be preferable? If you agree, I suggest striking "up" from alt 1. QPQ has been satisfied. And spot-checking finds no problems with unduly close paraphrasing, copyright violation or plagiarism. Cbl62 (talk) 15:41, 30 July 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for that thoughtful review, Cbl62 -- particularly for noticing that the transportation wasn't necessarily provided by the Bemis Company. I've struck the original hook, edited the article, and removed the word "up" from the ALT hook. Please see what you think. --Orlady (talk) 17:08, 30 July 2014 (UTC)
- ALT2:... that the designer of Bemis, Tennessee, a company town, tried to make it look as if it had grown over time? EEng (talk) 19:26, 30 July 2014 (UTC)
