Template:Did you know nominations/Foster Care Independence Act

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:49, 22 April 2012 (UTC)

Foster Care Independence Act[edit]

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... that First Lady of the United States Hillary Rodham Clinton was instrumental in the passage of the Foster Care Independence Act of 1999?

Created/expanded by Jrose88 (talk). Self nom at 16:54, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

Length, citations, within policy, and neutrality are all alright. Only one suggestion for a hook improvement is to tie some info about the article into it. I made a suggestion and change, this should be exactly 200 characters. Also put in (pictured) to indicate the picture of Hillary Clinton. If this is alright to the nominator, it should be passed Kayz911 (talk) 18:42, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

ALT1 Hook:

... that First Lady of the United States Hillary Rodham Clinton (pictured) was instrumental in the passage of the Foster Care Independence Act, that helps foster children obtain independent living skills? Kayz911 (talk) 18:42, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I will make some changes to the hook to incorporate your suggestions, but also make sure the information was worded correctly. Character count at 197. Jrose88 (talk) 18:59, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

thank you for your quick response, I wish all the DYK and articles passed were this good. If you are happy with the hook, we will go ahead and pass this as listedKayz911 (talk) 19:10, 16 April 2012 (UTC):

... that First Lady of the United States Hillary Rodham Clinton (pictured) was instrumental in the passage of the Foster Care Independence Act, that helps foster children obtain independent living skills?

Thanks for the feedback. I made some changes to the hook to incorporate your suggestions. Character count at 197. Jrose88 (talk) 19:46, 16 April 2012 (UTC)

... that First Lady of the United States Hillary Rodham Clinton (pictured) was instrumental in passing the Foster Care Independence Act, which funds independent living skills for youth in foster care?

very good we will pass that change if it was not clear already Kayz911 (talk) 19:26, 20 April 2012 (UTC)