Template:Did you know nominations/Mind Meld

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 12:33, 8 September 2014 (UTC)

Mind Meld[edit]

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... that the 2001 documentary Mind Meld features Star Trek's William Shatner and Leonard Nimoy discussing the effects the show had on their lives?

Reviewed: Mr. Pickles

Created by Neelix (talk). Nominated by Miyagawa (talk) at 22:28, 3 September 2014 (UTC).

An alternate hook might read as follows:

... that William Shatner denies flatulating in the 2001 documentary film Mind Meld?

Thanks for nominating the article, Miyagawa! Neelix (talk) 23:42, 3 September 2014 (UTC)

New enough and long enough. Article is hard to parse without any paragraph breaks, however, and by the end I was thinking of just having Kes kidnap Neelix so I could stop reading... could we break up the running prose a bit with some breaks?

Also, what do you think about Nimoy's confessions of alcoholism on the set as a hook? Or "Spock" and anger issues? Quite a few interesting revelations in there. I'm not too keen on the flatulence, simply because we get criticized enough for our toilet humor.

I can't check the offline sources, but I'll AGF on them. The two issues above are the only things I think are holding this back. Refs are good looking, image in the article is non free but has a rationale. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:25, 6 September 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Crisco 1492! I have split all the sections into multiple paragraphs as you suggested. How about the following hook?:

ALT2 ... that Leonard Nimoy revealed in the 2001 documentary film Mind Meld that he had struggled with alcoholism while acting in Star Trek: The Original Series?

I'd be glad to reformulate if you have additional recommendations. Neelix (talk) 20:08, 6 September 2014 (UTC)

Looking much better. The only shortcoming is that the hook fact doesn't have a ref now. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:48, 6 September 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for pointing that out! I need to be more careful when splitting paragraphs. I have added the now-necessary extra citation; the hook is sourced. Neelix (talk) 17:50, 7 September 2014 (UTC)

There we go. Article is new enough and long enough; no images going on the main page, but those in the article look okay. AGF on the offline references, which include the hook fact. The original and ALT2 are approved, both being interesting, short enough, and supported by a ref. Good to go. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:36, 7 September 2014 (UTC)