Template:Did you know nominations/Organ Mountains-Desert Peaks National Monument

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 20:36, 11 June 2014 (UTC)

Organ Mountains-Desert Peaks National Monument[edit]

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... that Organ Mountains-Desert Peaks National Monument (pictured), America's newest, protects 243 documented archaeological sites?

Created by NorthBySouthBaranof (talk), Jllm06 (talk). Nominated by NorthBySouthBaranof (talk) at 03:09, 26 May 2014 (UTC).

New enough. No QPQ review needed. But not long enough; DYK check shows "Prose size (text only): 1324 characters (196 words) "readable prose size". The bulleted list does not count. So, you need another 176 characters. NPOV. Checked all the refs and no close paraphrasing or copyvios found. However, the article needs inline citations for the "newest" claim, and for "protects 243 documented archaeological sites". Image is suitably free (I've added (pictured) to the hook), and I will have to trust you that the bit of the Organ Mountains shown really is within the National Monument.Edwardx (talk) 22:32, 26 May 2014 (UTC)

I have added several new references to this articles and I have extended the text to addess the problems that @Edwardx identified. Can I suggest an alt? Victuallers (talk) 21:03, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

ALT1 ~~... that the ~500,000 acres of the Organ Mountains-Desert Peaks National Monument (pictured) contain the sites of deceased "wild" life including the Ground Sloth, Billy the Kid and Geronimo?~~

ALT1 will get more hits, but that wording strongly implies that Billy and Geronimo are buried there, and they are not. Can you reword it somehow? Edwardx (talk) 23:24, 9 June 2014 (UTC)

ALT2: ... that the ~500,000 acres of the Organ Mountains-Desert Peaks National Monument (pictured) contain former stomping grounds of "wild" life such as the Ground Sloth, Billy the Kid and Geronimo? --Storye book (talk) 15:02, 10 June 2014 (UTC)

Alt2 and main hook are fine and reffed. Victuallers (talk) 20:05, 10 June 2014 (UTC)

I'm happy to sign off on the original hook and ALT2 (I've slightly changed "stamping-grounds" to "stomping grounds"). ALT2 preferred. Good to go. Edwardx (talk) 22:40, 10 June 2014 (UTC)