Template:Did you know nominations/Theta Tucanae

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The result was: promoted by Victuallers (talk) 23:02, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Theta Tucanae

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• ... that the primary star of the binary system Theta Tucanae has taken a whole solar mass from its once-larger companion?

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5x expanded by Casliber (talk). Self nominated at 08:50, 2 February 2014 (UTC).

• Date, size are fine, but I am afraid that neither the hook nor the article read well. The word "whole" is a bit jarring in the hook, and I don't see it in the article, which I had to read three times to make sure I follow the astronomical jargon and logic. And I am still not convinced if the term solar mass is used correctly; it is not even linked in the article. It is, however, inconsistently capitalized. The article needs to define "solar mass" (as in, mass of our Sun), than double check that its usage is correct (the confusion stems from the fact that it is not always clear if the term is used to mean "mass of Sun of the Solar System" or "mass of one of the stars in the TT system" or just "mass of the star". After this is revised, I'll probably abstain on the review, a second opinion from a native English speaker would be nice. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 16:10, 2 February 2014 (UTC)

• The term means something the weight of the sun. I used the term "whole" for emphasis and thought it would make it easier. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 20:33, 2 February 2014 (UTC)
• I have linked solar mass twice] - the earlier one is not literally mentioned but implied - happy to only have one link...but which one....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:46, 3 February 2014 (UTC)

• I thought I would finish off this review but cannot help agreeing with Piotrus that the article is a bit confusing and the hook claim dubious. Would it not be good to open the lead with a statement that Theta Tucanae is a binary system rather than "a star"? Then we could have a hook such as

• ALT1 ... that the primary star of the binary system Theta Tucanae has absorbed much of the mass of its once-larger companion? Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:54, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

Yeah, I'll be happy with that one.....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:14, 18 February 2014 (UTC)

• The article is new enough and long enough. The ALT1 hook is well sourced and I think it is insufficiently different from the original hook to warrant the statement "You can't approve your own hook". Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:40, 18 February 2014 (UTC)