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In my contribution to the article on the Stonewall Inn, I plan to add the history of the site prior to the riots which sparked the LGBT rights movement. I also plan to mention the names of they key participants of the raids on the night of June 28th, 1969 (the police officers and the owner of the bar) as well as give more context on the event that was being held that night and what the owner of the bar did to try and prevent the police raids from occuring.

David Carter, Stonewall: The Riots That Sparked the Gay Revolution(New York: St. Martin’s Press, 2004), 14–15.

John D’Emilio, William B. Turner, and Urvashi Vaid, eds., Creating Change: Sexuality, Public Policy, and Civil Rights (New York: St. Martin’s Press, 2000), 11.

The mentioning of 'some 8 police officers' does not lend credibility and should be specified and properly cited to a source. Also, the article says that the bar did 'a very good business,' which is also not credible and projects some bias. I intend to clear these up.

I have contributed to the article on the Stonewall Inn by adding that the property functioned as a tearoom during the Prohibition-era, named Bonnie's Stone Wall after the owner, a woman named Bonnie. It was later converted into a restaurant called Bonnie's Stonewall Inn.

I changed 'very good business' to 'was very favorable with the lesbian and gay population because of its intimate dance policy' to perhaps clarify what was good about the business and what made it so likable amongst the LGBT community.

I also named the police officers and departments that were involved with the raid, 'Seymour Pine of the New York City Vice Squad Public Morals Division and four other officers joined forces with two male and two female undercover police officers who were already stationed inside the bar, the lights on the dance floor flashed, signaling their arrival.' I have properly referenced my source for this statement. I added the amount of time that the police spent in the bar waiting for the tactical force squad to show up.

My topic and assigned article for editing was the Stonewall Inn. I contributed to the article in small segments as I gathered new data from academic journals and textbooks. I added some history, and in doing so clarified the confusion on the original purpose of the venue, as well who the owners were. In the section titled 'Establishment and occupation,' I wrote, "the property functioned as a tearoom during the Prohibition-era, named Bonnie's Stone Wall after the owner, a woman named Bonnie. It was later converted into a restaurant called Bonnie's Stonewall Inn." I also eliminated bias and questionable statements without sources by replacing the part that mentioned that the bar did 'a very good business' with 'was very favorable with the lesbian and gay population because of its intimate dance policy,' which I attributed to a sourced academic journal. Under the section titled, "The Stonewall Riots," I also added some information that was missing and that I felt was important, such as the key people that played a role in the riots that took place in the bar on the night of June 28th, 1969 and made the site historical for its pivotal function in the movement to liberation for the lesbian, gay, bisexual, and transgender (LGBT) movement. In the subsection titled, "Riots," I updated the article for accuracy and replaced 'some 8 police officers' with the names, departments, and types of cops that were involved in the police raid. I wrote, "Seymour Pine of the New York City Vice Squad Public Morals Division and four other officers joined forces with two male and two female undercover police officers who were already stationed inside the bar, the lights on the dance floor flashed, signaling their arrival." I also added on to the sentence that said that police were afraid of the gays. I said that as a result, they barricaded themselves inside the bar and waited there for forty five minutes until the Tactical Police Force arrived with cover up to take on the rioting populations. I think that my contributions helped to clarify and enrich the public on a topic that may be difficult to find information on since a lot of the eyewitness accounts are from people that are no longer alive and cannot share their story.