User:Relentlessly/GA/Team Sky

Prose comments

• "road cycling's major events as well as the three Grand Tours in Italy, France and Spain" -- this doesn't make sense as the three Grant Tours are road cycling's major road events...
• "nurture the young talent" -- this needs to be "nurture young talent" (as in the source) or to be more specific about what kind of young talent, e.g. "to nurture the young talent in Britain's track programme", if that were supported by a source.
• You should mention where Barry transferred from. I initially read it as his coming from Katusha and thought "that's not right..."
• It's odd to see Het Nieuwsblad referred to as Sky's "first one-day victory" when that seems to have been the Cancer Council Helpline Classic. I realise that OHN is the first professional victory, but the distinction needs to be made clear.
• The first paragraph of 2011 is not good prose; it's a list of results. There needs to be more narrative, with the context of Paris-Nice and the CdD as preparation for the Tour, perhaps with a summary of the results of other races in one or two sentences.
• "team leader Wiggins" -- this is a grammatical false title.

Referencing comments

• Lots of dead links, many of them references. Lots of these will be recoverable with Internet Archive.
• In "Formation" you say "positive and wide-ranging impact". The word "positive" does not appear in the source, while the rest is a direct quotation and should be in quotation marks.
• You don't mention a source for 2010 Giro/Vuelta wildcards.
• Ditto Wiggins at the 2010 Giro and Swift at the 2010 Picardie.
• No citation for EBH and Wiggins at 2011 Bayern-Rundfahrt
• No citation for Flecha continuing, EBH's wins, or Uran's finish at the Tour

Broad & focused

• You don't mention the Bradley Wiggins Garmin/Sky transfer saga. Was quite a big deal at the time...

MOS comments

• The lead is not really long or detailed enough. With WP:LEADLENGTH as a guide, the article really ought to have a three- or even four-paragraph lead. The team has won a whole host of other races and gained significant coverage (mentioned in the article) for others. At the moment it feels too short and unbalanced.

Image comments

• The "source" link for the jersey doesn't work. This isn't the end of the world, but I'm sure there must be a jersey image that could be accurately linked?
• In "2011: Grand Tour breakthrough" you have the sentence "At the time this was Sky's highest in a Grand Tour." This needs to be "highest finish" or "best result".
• The 2014 Critérium du Dauphiné is an image of the whole team and the caption should reflect that.