User talk:Acrimin/Architecture of Limerick

10/16/2018 Evaluation by Missi Jarrar

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Expectations This is going to be based on your first two paragraphs of Thomond Bridge because I’m not sure exactly what is yours in the second half of the Baal Bridge paragraph. I think the spelling and grammar are excellent. I feel as if you don’t need “condensing them into one” offset by commas because of the word larger. Read it to yourself out loud and you may hear what I’m talking about. Comma placement, I know, is an exceedingly debated thing. Annoying, too, that there are no em dashes on this.

Language

Exceeds Expectations Diction is great, seems professional. I would add “as the story goes,” to the onset of the tale about the drunk and the bridge just so that no one (and people do this) mistakes it for an authentic claim so it is less about your ability than other people’s ability to understand things like kids and such.

Organization

Exceeds Expectations Organization is good. Headers stand out clearly. Information is central and paragraphs are not wandering.

Coding

Meets Expectations No discernible problems.

Validity

Exceeds Expectations Great story about the bridge. You picked an interesting one to feature in your contribution. Who doesn’t love a ghost tale, right? It’s not only entertaining, but sets a feel for the history and cultural importance of the bridge. This and the specs on the bridge feel confident to me. I trust the information.

Completion

Meets Expectations I think there is a lot of room for expansion here, but there are no discernible holes in the narrative you have presented that I can determine. I’m not confused or frustrated reading it. There seem no significant omissions.

Relevance

Meets Expectations There do not appear to be any places where the subject strays from what I expect to read after reading the headings of the article.

Sources

Meets Expectations I looked at them all and saw nothing that stood out as questionable.

Citations

Exceeds Expectations You exceeded the recommended sources and then some. Great job on this article in general.

References

Exceeds Expectations Present and in working order. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Missi Jarrar (talk • contribs) 04:45, 17 October 2018 (UTC) Missi Jarrar (talk) 04:57, 17 October 2018 (UTC)

1/24/2018 Evaluation by Hannahshipman

Spelling/Grammar

Exceeds Expectations The title says it all.

Language

Meets Expectations Good. I can't fault the first Thomond Bridge paragraph, but some housekeeping/nitpicking I can add in to the second: I would say "The bridge was featured in" (I think it sounds more standard and less likely to cause momentary confusion). Also, "A vengeful ghost, formerly the wife of the local Bishop, encounters" since the book title doesn't mention a ghost. You could also clarify the beginning of the next paragraph with, "In 1691, the bridge was the site of a failed defense of the city during the Siege of Limerick."

Organization

Exceeds Expectations Clear and thorough.

Coding

Exceeds Expectations

Validity

Exceeds Expectations Great!

Completion

Exceeds Expectations These are now solid informational paragraphs.

Relevance

Exceeds Expectations Yep,

Sources

Exceeds Expectations Yep,

Citations

Exceeds Expectations and... Yep!

References

Exceeds Expectations Everything of yours seemed perfect. I noticed a couple others from, for example, the site with pictures of Limerick's architecture, that had nothing but a link. However, they were all for different paragraphs than yours, so why am I even mentioning them?