User talk:FFrenchyyyy
FFrenchyyyy, you are invited to the Teahouse![edit]
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August 2021[edit]
Welcome to Wikipedia, and thank you for your contributions. Although everyone is welcome to contribute constructively to the encyclopedia, please note that there is a Manual of Style that should be followed to maintain a consistent, encyclopedic appearance. Deviating from this style, as you did in Six Flags Magic Mountain, disturbs uniformity among articles and may cause readability or accessibility problems. Please take a look at the welcome page to learn more about contributing to this encyclopedia. Thank you. GoneIn60 (talk) 22:35, 3 August 2021 (UTC)
About those edits: for the first edit, why wouldn't you have a period at the end of the sentence? Second one, my bad didn't know that you refer to companies with which. The third edit adds clarity as the sentence starts with "At its opening" then doesn't clarify what "it" is. For the fourth edit, the original is fine but I think you need also or in addition as a transition. I don't see how my edit made it worse. For the fifth edit, the original doesn't follow parrallel structure. Sixth "started doing it themselves" is much more direct than "took on that role". For the seventh edit the word complex implies the attractions are related, they are all seperate from each other just installed the same land. I'vr never heard anyone describe a few carnival rides as a "complex of rides". For the 8th edit I don't see how that information is relavent or necessary information the entire park is the same way in that when it opened the trees were not tall or grown yet but now they are. FFrenchyyyy (talk) 23:37, 3 August 2021 (UTC)