User talk:Melissa Cary9/sandbox
Peer Review Olivia Castagno Hi Melissa! Overall, I think your additions to this article significantly strengthen it. The summary you added in the asymptomatic carrier section does a very good job outlining what asymptomatic carriers are in language that is clear and easy to understand. You definitely added very strong points that helped my understanding of the topic.
In the types of asymptomatic carriers section, maybe you could add a line at the beginning that states each type of carrier such as, “the three main types of carriers are incubator carriers, convalescent carriers, and healthy carriers”. Or maybe you could break it down into smaller sections. You don’t have to, but I think it would help make this section a little easier to understand and a bit more clear.
I also think in the possible explanations section, you maybe could explain it a little more, and how it relates to carriers. I found this section a little bit confusing, and I think the scientific language might be tough to understand for people that don’t have any background knowledge.
Overall, I think your additions are very good! I think the most important thing would be to make sure that your language is clear and broken down. For example, in the possible explanations section, I think adding a sentence at the top of the section to explain what it is you will be explaining and how it relates to your topic would be extremely useful. Similarly, in the types of asymptomatic carrier section, a quick one sentence overview of the types of carriers would help.
Peer Review Haley Perrone[edit]
What does the article (or section) do well? What changes would you suggest overall? What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!
The summary in the beginning of this article is very well written and provides concise, informative insight into the contents of the page. I appreciate how Melissa hyperlinked terms that may not be known by the average reader. The Disease Transmission section is also a strong point in her work thus far. This is a captivating topic and I am looking forward to reading Melissa's next draft. As I'm sure she is aware, the topics of "Latest Research" and "Infectious Diseases" are still a work in progress. I would recommend that Melissa continues to find reliable sources for these sections. The use of statistics regarding the number of carriers who are asymptomatic got me thinking about types of statistics that I may be able to include in my article if I can locate them. Overall, this article is coming along really well and I am looking forward to see the progress that Melissa makes moving forward.