User talk:Tholin37/sandbox3

Evaluations

12/5/2018 Evaluation by HelpMeKnow08

• Points: 39/40
• Grade: 97.5%

Spelling/Grammar

Meets Standard - First paragraph: add a period after "created," you could add italics for "Schutzhund" just before the definition of "protection dog," and make that one sentence instead of placing a comma. "In the early days...should start a new sentence." You could add to your description about the early days "designed to test breeding stock." What exactly were they testing for (temperament, obedience, etc)? Second paragraph: First sentence--change "created" to "bred", second sentence--Jack of all "trades." Third paragraph: add commas to "People now, after generations of breeding this dog." Add an apostrophe to "The breed's founders," it looks like an extra space needs to be deleted after the word "Berlin," add an 's' after "characteristic" (and that word should end the sentence). Change "lines" to "bloodlines" or some other descriptive word, use lower case 'g' for good nerves. End the sentence with "and trainability," then begin a new sentence with "All of these characteristics" and capitalize Schutzhund to maintain consistency. Fourth paragraph: change to lower case "tracking, obedience, and protection." Don't start sentence with "and," "All this must be done..." sounds better. Add a comma after "however."

Language

Meets Standard - First paragraph--you could omit the phrase "by far most exciting" as we aren't supposed to influence or make it sound like an opinion. Change "your" dog to "a" dog

Organization

Meets Standard - The first section header "Munich History of Schutzhund/IPO" looks like it could go under the Geography heading and simply called "Location" with a Subheading 1 font.

Coding

Nearly Meets Standard - Citations 2, 3, 9, 11, and 12 need the dates (formatting) corrected. Click edit (for the page) and then find your citation within the text that needs to be corrected (look for the red type). You will need to manually edit the date to the format: "5 December 2018".

Validity

Exceeds Standard

Completion

Meets Standard - If you are looking for more information to fill out your twenty sources, maybe you could state the highest scores ever received or any kind of records set during the competition. You could also highlight the specific names of popular competitions that garner the most attention (ala the Westminster Dog Show is regarded as the best show dog competition).

Relevance

Exceeds Standard - Yes! Very good!

Sources

Meets Standard

Citations

Meets Standard - Delete space before citation 5 and 7.

References

Nearly Meets Standard You just need a few more! Keep going! You could probably add a citation after the website URL in the first section.

12/4/2018 Evaluation by Mark Bauhofer

Mark Bauhofer (talk)

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Spelling/Grammar

Meets Expectations Grammar and Punctuation looks good.

Language

exceeds Expectations

Organization

Exceeds Expectations

Coding

Exceeds Expectations

Validity

Exceeds Expectations

Completion

Exceeds Expectations

Relevance

Exceeds Expectations

Sources

Exceeds Expectations

Citations

Exceeds Expectations

References

Exceeds Expectations