Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/2015–16 Bengaluru FC season/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was archived by Sarastro1 via FACBot (talk) 10:58, 18 February 2017 [1].

2015–16 Bengaluru FC season[edit]

Nominator(s): Coderzombie (talk) 14:07, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article is about the 2015–16 season of association football club, Bengaluru FC. The article has been reviewed for good article and I believe it has potential to be an FA as well. Coderzombie (talk) 14:07, 9 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Oppose. I think this article is a hard couple of months worth of work away from genuine consideration for Featured Article status. That might be partly the fault of the Good Article review, which should have dealt with the following problems:

There are numerous spelling errors, grammatical errors and infelicities; perhaps at the rate of one in every second sentence. Take for example the section dealing with April. Sentence 1: "Bengaluru played the first game of April against Mumbai F.C.." "the" first game of April for what? The competition as a whole or just for Bengaluru? Sentence 5 is far too long and has at least one incorrectly placed comma. In Sentence 6, "title deciding" should be hyphenated. The same goes for "short lived" in Sentence 8. Sentence 12 is missing "the" before "8th minute" while "blues" should be capitalised. Sentence 13 is very problematic: "taped" should be "tapped" and there needs to be a word before "seventh straight win". And there are other less obvious issues in the section. So, as I said, roughly one in every two sentences. That is a rate of error that cannot reasonably be fixed during a Featured Article candidacy.

The month-by-month recitation of the season is very dry. There is little flavour other than goals and wins. For example, the recitation fails to draw out, either explicitly or implicitly, who the key players in the team were and why. Nor is there any discussion or even allusion to the team's style of play. I think that more is required for a Featured Article-quality review of a football season.

Syek88 (talk) 18:45, 15 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for your feedback. I will involve more editors who can fix the copy-editing and other issues. Coderzombie (talk) 18:52, 15 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment: I think these issues are best dealt with away from FAC. This can be brought back once there has been a little more work on the article. Sarastro1 (talk) 10:57, 18 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: This candidate has been archived, but there may be a delay in bot processing of the close. Please see WP:FAC/ar, and leave the {{featured article candidates}} template in place on the talk page until the bot goes through. Sarastro1 (talk) 10:58, 18 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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