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The article was not promoted by Ucucha 19:41, 20 January 2012 [1].

24: The Game[edit]

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Nominator(s): Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 21:53, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I am nominating this for featured article because I feel it meets the criteria. I have gone through the article and made some small changes. I am not the most significant contributor to the article by far, however think I can make the necessary changes to have this article promoted. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 21:53, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Media review

—Andrewstalk 22:59, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Support based on criterion 3 only —Andrewstalk 05:48, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Oppose for now. This is a solid article, but I don't think that it's of FA quality yet. In particular, some of the prose needs work and the final section of the article is unpolished. My comments are below, and as a disclaimer I should note that I'm one of the few people in the English-speaking world who've never watched an episode of 24! — Nick-D 23:01, December 29, 2011 UTC — continues after insertion below
    • "The Game was nominated for a BAFTA award for its screenplay elements." - you should note that it didn't win
      • It is noted in the reception section that it didn't win. Does it need to be noted in the lede as well?
        • Probably not - it is self evident, I guess. Nick-D (talk) 09:54, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "including 3 movies" - replace '3' with 'three'
    • Was the cover system really 'unique'? I'm pretty sure that I played FPS well before 2006 which included functions to crouch behind objects. The reference provided doesn't say this was 'unique' to this game.
      • Fixed. Yeah, I couldn’t see it anywhere either, so I’ve changed the sentence to "Most of the game's missions take place in third-person shooting format, combined with the use of a cover system". Does that work for you?
    • Most of the para which begins with "There are several missions in which the player controls a motor vehicle." is unreferenced
    • The first sentence of the 'Minigames' section should introduce the topic. "With the exception of the interrogation minigame, they are all computer puzzles" doesn't really introduce the fact that the game includes minigames
    • Given that the use of torture in the interrogation scenes in 24 was controversial, was torture included in the game's interrogation minigames?
    • "24: The Game takes place 6 months after Day 2 and two and a half years before Day 3." - I suspect that this makes sense to the people who've seen the TV show, but it flies over my head. Am I right in thinking that Day 2 and 3 are the second and third seasons of the show?
    • "Section one revolves around an attack on Jim Prescott" - likewise, who this is needs to be explained
    • "News that many of the sound effects and noises from the TV series would be used in the game was also mentioned in the announcement." - the use of 'news' in the context of a press release is a bit odd. I'd suggest turning this around to something like "The announcement also stated that sound effects and noises from the TV series would be used in the game"
    • "Speculation about 24: The Game was initially positive following the announcement that it would be developed by Sony Computer Entertainment's Cambridge Studio." - "speculation ... was initially positive" isn't good grammar, and why was the use of the Cambridge studio seen as being a positive?
    • "the fall of 2005" - which is spring here in the Southern hemisphere... I'd suggest changing this to 'the northern fall of 2005' or similar
    • Was the game released outside North America and Europe? I'm pretty sure that I saw it here in Australia.
      • It was released in Australia as well. I've added that in with this edit.
    • Given that almost all computer games based on TV shows and movies have been disappointing, were expectations really 'high'? This also isn't referenced.
    • "was also liked" - this is a bit awkward
    • "although fans of the series may find that the viewpoints, motives and reasoning of the villains isn't covered well." - ditto
    • "Voice acting was generally popular" - this is cited to a single review, which obviously doesn't support this claim about the overall response to the game
    • "well liked" - also awkward
      • Fixed, changed to "well received" here but the structure of the reception section is a bit off (per comments made here) so I think I'll restructure the reception section similar to Final Fantasy X. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 07:19, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
        • This is looking better, but there are still several instances of comments about the general reception to aspects of the game being cited to a single reference Nick-D (talk) 09:54, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • "The soundtrack and musical score were singled out for particular praise" is cited to one website that appears to do nothing but review soundtracks, and so doesn't support the statement that this was "singled out for particular praise"
    • "The music was recorded using an orchestra, while the music in the TV series was mostly synthesized." - shouldn't be in the 'reception' section
    • "The use of licensed assets in these ways proved to be the game's main popular point, with almost all gameplay sections heavily criticized." - this is unreferenced, and 'licensed assets' is jargon.
    • "Sniper variants of this fared better." - what the 'this' is here is a bit unclear
    • "The vehicle sections were also disappointing, with physics and vehicle handling being rated poorly." - this is cited to only a single review, so doesn't support the implication that these elements of the game were generally poorly rated
    • 'artificial intelligence' is linked the second time it appears in the article, and is abbreviated as AI the first time
    • "The use of artificial intelligence in these sections were heavily criticized" - again, this is referenced to only a single review, so doesn't really support the statement that this was "heavily criticized".
    • " Interrogation scenes were, in contrast, well liked, with reviewers finding the dialogue during these scenes entertaining" - this statement about 'reviewers' is also referenced to a single review.
    • Is any information available about the game's sales and if it made a profit?
      • Had a look in LexisNexis, there's probably stuff there but I couldn't find anything. Couldn't see anything in Google archives either. I think the inclusion of "24" in the search makes things tougher...not sure what to do there. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 01:26, 1 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • This might not be publicly available. I presume that you've checked the company which published this game's annual report? (which should be somewhere in the corporate section of its website). Nick-D (talk) 09:54, 10 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Have any sequels been proposed or made? Nick-D (talk) 23:01, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • No sequels were made for the game, no, and none were proposed. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 00:16, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
      • Part of the reason for me bringing this to FAC is because I think it meets the criteria, but know that I others who are much more skilled in article writing will pick up issues, so I can address them, which I hope to do. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 23:18, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done. Nikkimaria (talk) 22:42, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In general, it seems like this article is a bit short on sources. Of the 21 currently included, 3 are from the game's publisher, and four more are a game walk-through. Any chance more sources are available? Nikkimaria (talk) 22:42, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • I had a look for more sources and had a fair bit of difficulty finding anything, even in LexisNexis. I think it might be due to the "24" bit, searching for 24 will include dates as well. Kinda came up dry. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 01:26, 1 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • Any update on this? Were you able to find additional sources? Nikkimaria (talk) 22:16, 14 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Not much luck, no. Most of what I found were game reviews, which I am adding in the reception section, but that's about it. Just to add, I apologise for the delay in attending to some of these items. I've been crazy busy these last few weeks, but I intend to have these items fixed over the next few days. Steven Zhang Join the DR army! 03:09, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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