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The article was promoted by Ian Rose 04:52, 27 August 2012 [1].

Give Peace a Chance (Grey's Anatomy)[edit]

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Nominator(s): TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs), Nikkimaria (talk) 16:13, 20 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

An episode of the hit primetime medical drama Grey's Anatomy, known for deviating from its usual themes. I am nominating it for featured article status because I created it, had it featured at DYK, listed as a GA, and approved for A-class. A lot of work has been put into this article to ensure it meets the criteria, including a peer review from TBrandley and a recent copyedit from Nikkimaria. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 16:13, 20 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Source review - spotchecks not done

  • Ref. 14 is missing its publisher (Blogspot)
  • Ref. 16 is missing its publisher (Logo)

TBrandley 01:46, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Both done. Thanks for the source review; I was concerned about who would have done it since Nikkimaria is a nominator :-) TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 01:51, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I think she most likely would of questioned Wetpaint, Zap2it, and TV Fanatic as sources. But, those have been explained before. TBrandley 02:00, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Those have been determined reliable. By the way; Nikkimaria is a girl :-) TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:26, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Oh, yeah. Used to writing "he". :0 TBrandley 02:10, 24 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Image review

TBrandley 01:49, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Other comments

  • Where is the episode's running time referenced?
  • Any production codes; some are located at epguides, which was good for the FA, "Say Hello to My Little Friend"
    • The show stopped using production codes after the fifth season. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:26, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The episode was designed to revolve around Dempsey's character.". How is that?
    • It's explained in 'Production'; it was written with him as the main focus. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:26, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • ""Give Peace a Chance" opens with". Very repetitive. Please remove.
  • "as production designer". missing a "the" before "production"
  • According to Nowalk, → Nowalk opined
    • Not done; that is awkward because "opined" is synonymous with giving their opinion. It wasn't his opinion, it is fact; he wrote the episode. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:26, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per MOS:PUNCT, "Consistent use of the straight (or typewriter) apostrophe ( ' ) is recommended, as opposed to the curly (or typographic) apostrophe ( ’ )." That said, I see several instances of the curly being used in the quote feautead at the end of production. Examples are It’s, That’s, etc. Please change.
  • You mention reviews from critics, but, then, to find more, you have to look at the second paragraph. Merge "The episode received positive reviews among critics" to the second paragraph
  • I see looks of "X of X". Perhaps change it up. Example: Writing for X, X, X editor X, etc.
  • gave a positive review of the entry → gave the entry a positive review

TBrandley 01:58, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for supporting, but just to clarify, what were you saying was very repetitive? TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:31, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
""Give Peace a Chance" opens with". We do know that it opens to them. Its the first sentence, just WP:COMMONSENSE. TBrandley 02:32, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
It was chosen as a lead-in word, instead of just saying "Webber is implementing...". TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 02:34, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Fair enough. TBrandley 02:35, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments fro Crisco 1492 moved to talk

  • Support - Fairly short, but solid. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 03:40, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • 'Support. With the issues being resolved, GPAC is now ready to be an FA. --Sofffie7 (talk) 08:02, 21 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

  • "The initial airing was viewed by 13.74 million Americans" not definite. Hypothetically, an Australian, on holiday in Atlanta might have viewed the episode – does that make them American, or native to the country? Going by Triangle (The X-Files), best to use 'viewers'.
    • I changed it to 'people' because it sounded redundant to say "viewed by XX million viewers". TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 20:22, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Is multihour hyphenated or not? I'm certain I've seen it presented singular (as a Countdown conundrum) and prefixes like mega, mini and multi very rarely need hyphens. Might just be hyphenated in American English so be sure to double check. Lemonade51 (talk) 18:46, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • The spellcheck on my computer says it's hyphenated. In addition, a quick google search without hyphenation makes the word hyphenated. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 20:22, 22 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]


Comments from Cassianto

  • I would like to see a lead image. Is that possible?
    • That makes two of us. Look at all the episode screenshots here. Do you think any of them meet NFCC? TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 21:27, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Out of all of them, I think this would be the best as it shows a lot of the cast which the article talks about. It also shows them in hospital clothing and would be necersary to illustrate exactly what they look like. The article, I feel, could do with some illustration. I have never seen the series and whilst reading it, I was trying to visualise what the characters might have looked like; this image (or one similar) would certainly of helped. I am no image guru so it will have to properly assessed as to the meeting of NFCC criteria, but I think you might have a strong enough case to include it or one like it. -- CassiantoTalk 04:04, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • I don't think that meets NFCC. Usually, the only time it seems episodic images are allowed, is when they are critically commented on. I feel like this would be deleted. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 04:11, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Knowing that she will not be able to use the bathroom for the entire procedure, Lexie decides to wear a diaper into the operating room, which impresses Yang." Why would this impress her?
  • "Isaac asks Shepherd to attempt removing it." --- "Isaac asks Shepherd to operate on him"
    • I think that's a bit ambiguous, because he could be asking him to do any random surgery; he asks him to remove the tumor. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 21:27, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Its not that ambiguous when you consider we have mentioned he is suffering from a tumour. Also, "attempt removing" sounds wrong. "attempt to remove it" sounds better IMO -- CassiantoTalk 01:55, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        • I've changed it to simply "Isaac asks Shepherd to remove it." TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 03:40, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "...the episode was written by Peter Nowalk and directed by Wilson" -- I would use Wilson's full name here as its the first time she is mentioned.
    • Her name is linked and given in full in 'Plot'. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 21:27, 26 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      • Ah OK, sorry I missed that. I think there needs to be some explaination that she was the director and the actress in the episode. As far as I can see there is no mention of this within the same sentence. Wilson is a very common surname and without the explanation early on that she did both, one would have to stop reading to go back to check it was the same person. I think with this explained, surname usage would be OK. -- CassiantoTalk 01:55, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Jenny Barak edited the music..." Edited or composed? Or did she edit the already composed music. If so "edit" sounds strange.
  • "Nowalk said the scenes were difficult to shoot, due to the technicality involved".
  • ""Give Peace a Chance" was originally broadcast on October 29, 2009 in the United States on the American Broadcasting Company (ABC) channel"
    • I've never seen it written like that. For example, see "Say Hello to My Little Friend", a recently promoted FA. (I know it's NBC, but it's the same concept except for the first word.)
  • We mention "I Saw What I Saw" by name the second time around when I think it should be the first. For example "The episode underperformed the previous installment in terms of viewership. It was viewed by a total of 13.74 million people, down 1.66 percent from the previous episode "I Saw What I Saw", which garnered 15.04 million viewers."

That's it for now. I'll give it another read through once these have been addressed. Looking good though! -- CassiantoTalk

Everything's done. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 03:40, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support per the resolved comments above. A nice little article :-) -- CassiantoTalk 03:54, 27 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]


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