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The list was promoted by User:Scorpion0422 21:24, 27 December 2008 [1].

List of awards and nominations received by Alicia Keys[edit]

I am nominating List of awards and nominations received by Alicia Keys because I'm sure this list meets the FL criteria. The list is very long as Keys has received almost 150 nominations in her seven year career. The only possible concern would be the amazingly lengthy second paragraph of the lead; if there are anyway to resolve this, let me know. DiverseMentality 01:16, 14 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from SRX

Oppose - many prose problems

  • Keys' second album, The Diary of Alicia Keys was released on December 2, 2003. - comma after the album name
  • Keys' first live album (third overall), Unplugged was released on December 2, 2003. - comma after the album name
  • It spawned two singles, with one that reached the Billboard Hot 100: "Unbreakable" and "Every Little Bit Hurts". - reword so the reader is able to know which song is the one that reached the BH100. Also, a colon is not the right pause to use here, should be a comma.
  • The album was certified Platinum by the RIAA. - this can be merged with the sentence from my second point.
  • Keys' third album (fourth overall), As I Am was released on December 2, 2003. - comma after the album name
  • It spawned one single: "Another Way to Die". - comma not colon.
  • It spawned four singles that reached the Billboard Hot 100: "No One", "Like You'll Never See Me Again", "Teenage Love Affair" and "Superwoman". - comma not colon
  • The second paragraph is ridicilous. It should briefly summarize her awards, not all of them. See List of awards and nominations received by Chris Brown
  • Rename the article to List of awards and nominations received by Alicia Keys
  • The Other honors and accolades - are not necessarily her awards but misc honors, so IMO they don't belong here.--SRX 01:31, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
  • In 2006, Keys received twelve nominations and won three, Outstanding Female Artist, Outstanding song and Outstanding Music Video for "Unbreakable" at the NAACP Image Awards. - there needs to be a transition before the award names like in the previous sentences.
  • In 2008, Keys received twenty-nine nominations and won fifteen, including Best Album, Pop/Rock and Best Album, Soul/R&B for As I Am at the American Music Awards; Best Female R&B Vocal Performance and Best R&B Song for "No One" at the Grammy Awards; World's Best Selling R&B Artist at the World Music Awards. - there should be an and somewhere in the final part of the sentence or else it is a run on.--SRX 18:53, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
I've fixed the sentences. DiverseMentality 19:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've drastically cut down the lead; if I cut anymore off, there would be a large spacing problem where the infobox ends and where the tables begin. I'm pretty sure I've also fixed all grammatical errors. I've also gone ahead and moved the article. DiverseMentality 03:36, 14 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Okay, it looks a lot better now. Perhaps break down the two paragraphs into four, as they are still pretty long. Gary King (talk) 03:51, 14 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I've split them. Hopefully it's satisfactory, I pretty much split them down the middle. DiverseMentality 04:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Support, all issues resolved. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:59, 19 December 2008 (UTC) [reply]
Resolved issues, Dabomb87 (talk)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

  • "a prestigious high school in Manhattan," According to whom is the school "prestigious"?
  • "in only three years."
  • "The album was certified four-times Platinum" No hyphen needed here or in any other related sentence on how many times something was certified.
  • "It spawned four singles that reached the Billboard Hot 100, "You Don't Know My Name", "If I Ain't Got You", "Diary" and "Karma"." First comma should be a colon.
  • Could you mention her recording labels?
  • "Overall, Keys has one 76 awards from 148 nominations." Two things: 1) "one"-->won, 2) Why are the numbers in numerals when all other numbers in the lead are spelled out?
  • Ref 63 needs format=PDF added to it, otherwise, sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 00:12, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    I can't believe I misspelled "won"; how embarrassing. All concerns addressed. DiverseMentality 00:58, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Sources look good. Dabomb87 (talk) 02:59, 19 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Gonzo fan2007
  • In the first 2 paragraphs, "spawn" is used 5 times. Consider rewording some of them (spawn @ thesaurus.reference.com).
  • The sentence structure is very repetitive (i.e. "In *YEAR*, Keys received *#* nominations and won *#*). Considering rewording to make the prose more exciting.
  • Overall, very well done. After a few small changes, I would be glad to support. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 00:41, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Fixed the first issue. Not quite sure how to go on about the second, though. DiverseMentality 02:50, 24 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
    Support The second issue isn't a deal-breaker for me. Nice work! « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:42, 25 December 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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