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2007–08 Boston Celtics season

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I've listed this article for peer review because I am not sure whether it has all needed requirements for featured article status, and I don't want to directly nominate it without getting second opinions first. It has tons of information, but I feel the "Summary" section needs to be expanded, and if this is not possible, it should be renamed to "Off-season". What else needs to be changed?

Thank you in advance. ● 8~Hype ^@ 14:20, 22 August 2008 (UTC)

Preliminary comments (Chensiyuan)

• Cons
  • Why bother linking the dates under "Key dates"? For that matter, why link any standalone month/day dates?
  • Check for proper dashes.
  • I don't consider it necessary to wikilink more than once within the same section. Overlinking is most obvious in the "Records" section.
  • "Curiously, Jones was involved in a trade back in the 2003 NBA Draft, in which the Celtics drafted him with the 20th overall selection, but immediately traded him with the 16th pick, Troy Bell, to the Memphis Grizzlies in exchange for the 13th pick, Marcus Banks, and the 27th pick, Kendrick Perkins." Curiously?
  • The overwhelming majority of the article pertains to statistics, results and lists. Where is the prose? It just stopped after the pre-season transactions. You can't just condense the regular season and playoffs into a list.
  • Notice that every table looks so different from each other?
  • Headings should not be wikilinked.

• Pros
  • References properly cited.
  • Adequate references provided.
  • Images.

• Conclusion
  • Would definitely fail GA. Chensiyuan (talk) 16:20, 22 August 2008 (UTC)