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A&W Root Beer[edit]

I've listed this article for peer review because I need help getting it to good article status. I'm looking for constructive critisicsm, for errors in the article, and for comments on the article in general. Thanks, - ~VNinja~ 18:31, 7 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Woody[edit]

  • I think that Wikipedia:Companies, corporations and economic information should be of help here.
  • First things first, the article is very short, there should be some more information out there that could be added. The history of the company needs to be expanded. There should be a separate history section describing the creation and expansion of the company.
  • It needs third party, verifiable sources. At the moment the only references come from the company itself.
  • We don't need the "®" in A&W Root Beer®.
  • It needs expansion in general. What are the sales figures since they went into supermarkets?
  • Where is it sold and by whom?
  • So overall, a good start but needs quite a bit of work to meet B/GA standards. Keep up the good work. Woody (talk) 13:11, 9 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • It might be worth taking a look at other soft drinks that have achieved Good Article status, just for comparison. Look, for example, at New Coke or Coca-Cola and notice the extensive coverage of the product, the business, and the history of both. --Midnightdreary (talk) 18:03, 11 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I made some minor changes and reorganized a bit, plus left a note on the talk page. Good luck with continuing to build this article! --Midnightdreary (talk) 18:16, 11 January 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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