Wikipedia:Peer review/Apple Macintosh/archive1

This article has been through the Article Improvement Drive, and now I'm putting it up for peer review. I see that it is still lacking References, sadly; but is there anything else that could be improved? There is a to-do list at the article's talk page. It is certainly one of the best pages about a line of personal computers on Wikipedia. What do you think? — Wackymacs 07:49, 29 October 2005 (UTC)

• There is one article from a 1994 (?) issue of Popular Science entitled "Insanely Great" that talked about the development of the original Mac. So far, this article looks okay, but I'll look into it in more details later. Pentawing 21:28, 29 October 2005 (UTC)
• The eMac is being described as an 'eduactional institute only model' on this page, which is, as of now, not the case anymore. eMacs originally were sold only for educational purposes, but not long after the introduction, Apple decided to normally sell eMacs as well (and still does so, see the Apple Store). I guess some rephrasing would be in place there. Joost 23:16, 30 October 2005 (UTC)
  • Actually, the eMac is an educational-only product once again. The Mac Mini is now the consumer low-end and the iMac G5 is the consumer all-in-one model, so the reason for moving the eMac into the retail pipeline is gone. Schools don't really want the Mini because it can't be secured as easily as an eMac can - size matters - but most don't need everything the iMac G5 offers either. Apple quietly moved the eMac back to the Education Store in October and new machines are no longer available for individual sale - a search at the Apple Store for 'eMac' returns refurbished eMacs only. However, eMacs remain available from other retailers and discount sites until the supply runs out. ddlamb 01:58, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
• Corrected that - the eMac now has all information regarding it's availability. TDS ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:42, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
• Also, I have the following points of criticism:
  1. The Mac Mini is described as a 'CPU that requires monitors and peripherals not included to function', which is technically inaccurate. The case that is the Mac Mini is quite a bit more than just a microprocessor.
  2. It is written that "In 2000, the Macintosh made a second fundamental change, this time in its operating system, by switching to the Mach and BSD Unix-based Mac OS X, from the original Pascal based Mac OS.". The old Mac OSes are not "Pascal based" any more than the new Mac OS would be "C based" (with most of BSD and the Mach kernel being written in C). Being written in a certain programming language is something quite different from being based upon another OS, and because of this the whole phrasing "Pascal based Mac OS" seems inaccurate.
  3. Under the caption 'Software' there is a link to Mac OS X as main article. Shouldn't this be a link to Mac OS (without X) under the caption 'Operating System'?
  4. Also, under the caption 'Software history' there is a link to Mac OS history as main article, even though all of the content of that section is about application software for Macs, rather than about the history of the operating system (which is treated briefly under the 'Operating system' caption). I guess it would be better not to have any main article here at all (unless there is an article specifically dealing with the history of application software for Macintoshes, which I doubt). Joost 23:47, 30 October 2005 (UTC)
  • Yours point have all been addressed. TDS ^{(talk • contribs)} 19:42, 10 November 2005 (UTC)
  • I'm now working on this article and am beginning to revise much of it. TDS ^{(talk • contribs)} 18:56, 2 November 2005 (UTC)