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Blue Comet SPT Layzner[edit]

An anime from the 1980's; the redlinked article was directed from the Super Robot Wars page, and I added a general overview. Now other people have expanded this a lot and I'm interested in making this into a featured article. Please help with any advice/direction you may have. Thank you. Viewer 00:12, 3 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

no references
expand infobox (maybe merge Staff into it)
story section needs a spoiler tag
- Correction, 'story' sections should have spoilers written out of them. --zippedmartin 00:49, 17 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
external links should be included for people looking for more information.
trivia needs to be expanded
- "Delete triva section" is one of the first things people on FAC will say... --zippedmartin 00:49, 17 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
I suggest creating a "Reception" section talking about ratings and show reviews. Merge US Release section into there.

...most of this information is in the second paragraph in the lead.

lead should included where the show was brodcasted. Japan?
Super Powered Tracers section is a little over detailed, If you wish, create a subpage for it and/or only summarize it on this page.
Image:Layzner music album.jpg is included in the article and its copyright said its a album cover. No mention of a soundtrack/album is in the article.
Characters section is also over-detailed. A sub-page should be created if you wish otherwise the section should include only the protagonists and antagonists.
image sizes are too large making the article look unprofesion. Also possibly there might be too many images, I recommend reducing.

Thats all I can see for now, more expansion would help and a good copy-edit. Thank you. - Tutmosis 00:55, 3 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, Tutmosis. Viewer 19:22, 4 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Main problem is huge number of completely unsourced assertions, I'm tempted to go through the article and sprinkle {{Template:Citeneeded}} around, but for instance: "was a ratings failure in its second arc" who says? what were the ratings? "the final Episode in particular feels like a rushed, incomplete mess" In who's opinion? etc etc. See also User:BrianSmithson/Writing_about_fiction. --zippedmartin 00:49, 17 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The Characters section does only contain protagonists and antagonists: the Show is an ensemble Cast.

And the Show was obviously a ratings failure since it was cut back from 50-something Episodes to 38, coincidentally two of the biggest Gundam Series-along with several other popular Mecha-aired at this time. As for the last Episode...it's seen in its entirety in OVA #3, wherein it makes a lot more sense and is less "edited".