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British ice hockey league champions

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I've been working on this article for a few weeks in my sandbox and have just loaded the rewritten version onto the article. I'd like to get it to featured list eventually. I appreciate that more references may be needed, but I'm not entirely sure where. The bulk of this article has been done with the two books listed as the primary sources so I have just placed inline references where I think it's most neccessary. If there's anywhere else that needs a citation then please point it out. The top points scorer between 1956 and 1960 has also proved tricky. I've spoken to the author of the books I use as sources and he tells me that the Ice Hockey World Annual, which is the primary source of information for the first professional era of hockey in the UK, did not publish after it's 1956 edition and that statistics for that period aren't presently known.

Thanks in advance for any comments and suggestions. KimThePanther (talk) 20:43, 9 June 2008 (UTC)

JD554 comments: Hi Kim, this is looking good. But I do have a few suggestions:

• Is there a free image that can be used at the beginning of the article? Something like the current league trophy would be good.

• "Prior to the formation of the British National League, England and Scotland each had their own competitions".

• I'd turn the next sentence around so the earliest formed league came first.

• "The English National League was founded in 1935 and became the sole English league the following year." Also why did it become the sole English league? Was it because the English League had disbanded, and if so why did they disband or cease operating?

• "In 1954 the decision was taken to amalgamate the two leagues into one." Presumably this is referring to the Scottish National League and the English National League now?

• "The league was closed down following the 1959–60 season." Was it closed down (if so, by who - creditors, the courts?) or did it disband?

• "No organized ice hockey took place in the United Kingdom between the British National League's closure in 1960 and the formation of the Northern League in 1966." Were there no organized amateur competitions? I think Brighton Tigers did this until their rink was demolished.

• "This league, made up of teams from Scotland and North East England, was joined by the Southern League in 1970." This sounds like the Southern League already existed and joined the other leagues in the Northern League.

• "The British Hockey League was formed in 1982 with the Premier League being launched a season later." Wasn't it the Premier Division?

• Use the full name for "Superleague" and "Elite League".

• Sheffield Steelers aren't defunct!

• "Season" would be better in the first columns.

• Presumably the number in brackets after the winner is how many times they've won the title up to that point? Should say in the column header eg, "(number of titles)"

• The Player column needs centring in the top table.

• "their parts of the United Kingdom"

• I know the Ulster Banner can be contentious. Northern Ireland#Symbols states "It remains, however used uniquely to represent Northern Ireland in certain sporting events." Is ice hockey one of those sporting events?

I hope this is of some help to you, --JD554 (talk) 14:25, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for the suggestions JD554. I've rewritten the history to try and make it more in line with what you've said and I'm no longer trying to persuade people that the Steelers no longer exist. ;-) The Northern Ireland banner is quite a tricky one due to Belfast's policy of trying not to associate with either community and represent Belfast as a whole and because British ice hockey is organised at a British level. I'll see about finding a picture that could be fit in. Sadly being a Panthers fan a picture of the league trophy isn't something I currently have in my collection! KimThePanther (talk) 20:44, 10 June 2008 (UTC)