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Chambersburg, Pennsylvania[edit]

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I'd like to get this article up to FA status. Any information that should be included for this article, and any areas that need improvement?

Thanks, Monobi (talk) 17:22, 24 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)

I did notice something looking at the sources of this article, that every single one was available online. It is perfectly acceptable to use printed sources, and often times it's better to use them, as they will be more reliable than online sources.
Otherwise the sources look good. You said you wished to go to FA with this, and I've checked over the sources like I would have at FAC. I did not read the prose or do any checking of the prose. 21:51, 24 May 2008 (UTC)
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Comments from Doncram (talk · contribs)

  • I notice that the previous peer review complained about there not being more history coverage after 1870, which seemed partly unfair, as Chambersburg's involvement in Indian wars was interesting and its direct involvement in the American Civil War was quite dramatic. It would be hard to top that and come up with anything comparable for involvement in World War I, World War II, etc., as a peer reviewer wished for. Certainly no invention or overstatement of significant post-Civil War history should be attempted, if nothing really happened since then.
  • However, I do also note with interest the included list of 10 or so sites listed on the National Register of Historic Places in the borough (drawn from NRHP.COM, a private source serving up copies of public domain information on National Register sites). These sites are also listed at List of registered historic places in Pennsylvania#Franklin County, for now all as red-links except for the college (but whose article does not explain its listing on the National Register). Each one of these sites meets wikipedia notability standards and deserves an article that describes the site's historical significance. It would advance your knowledge of Chambersburg in general to work to develop articles for each one of these, and then this article on Chambersburg could refer to them. WP:NRHP is an active wikiproject; you could start by beginning to develop stubs for each of those red-links and ask for assistance on sources and on inclusion of infoboxes at the WP:NRHP talk page.
  • It is especially important to develop the Chambersburg Historic District article, and to use information from it and its sources in this article on the wider town. Search the state of Pennsylvania's ARCH system for photos and documents about each of these using the ARCH search here; you can search on all sites in Franklin County or in Chambersburg. Specifically, a 24 page PDF file of the National Register nomination form for the Chambersburg Historic District, which includes a map of the district marked on a larger map of the town, is available here. By the way, that source states that Chambersburg is the only major Northern city that was burned in the American Civil War, which should be mentioned in this article if it is not already. Certainly you should browse the materials available on all of these historic sites.
  • Models can be very helpful. An article on Meridian, Mississippi that is currently undergoing peer review may provide a good example. Its history section is greatly advanced by discussion of each of that city's NRHP historic districts. The peer review (still open) discusses options for creating maps to show the historic district boundaries which would be relevant here too. In general, a way to describe the history of a town is to describe the history of its components. For the components that are NRHPs, there are good sources available to enable those stories to be told.
  • Hope these comments are helpful. doncram (talk) 15:20, 30 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from WVhybrid (talk · contribs)

  • I think this article is in pretty good shape, but I’ve added a few notes for consideration.
  • Almost no mention of transportation is made in the article. Chambersburg is located along I-81, a major transportation corridor. Only one sentence mentions the highway. The completion of that road (probably in the 1960s) no doubt had an effect on the economy, the population, and the history of the town that could be described.
  • Why is old US 11 mentioned in the lead, but the more modern I-81 not mentioned?
  • The demographics section seems to be a dry recitation of facts. Can the writing in that section be improved with a rewrite, a table, or an infobox?
  • I hope you find these comments useful. WVhybrid (talk) 03:39, 12 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]
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