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F-Zero GX[edit]

Needs a push to get to FA. Any thoughts?--Clyde (talk) 22:56, 14 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Trebor[edit]

  • The dates in the lead should be wikilinked for date preferences to work (see WP:MOSDATE) or you might want to remove them altogether and just say "released in 2003" (it just seems slightly detailed for the second sentence + it's in infobox). Done
  • but introduces a new element - not a contradiction of the first bit, so no "but" needed Done
  • story mode, the player - perhaps could be "where the player". Done
  • This adds strategy and replay value - original research without a cite (if I'm being picky). Done
  • Repetition of variety in in the first paragraph of Gameplay - use "range" or another similar word Done
  • characteristics including Top Speed, Grip, Boost, and Body - it's been a while since I've played, but aren't they the only distinct characteristics? That would make including a misleading word Done
  • First of all - "of all" = redundant, plus there should probably be a "second" later on instead of "additionally". Done
  • "side attacks or spin attacks - remove the first "attack". Done
  • players can play - what else would they do - sounds a bit odd. Done
  • etc is an abbreviation of a Latin term and shouldn't be used (see here
  • In essence - redundant Done
  • players regard snaking as anything from legitimate and advanced racing strategy, to an unfair tactic, or even outright cheating - needs cite Done
  • The "story mode", which is new to the series - been told that at least twice before then, bit unnecessary (or at the very least could be changed to "the new story mode" cutting out 5 words) Done
  • its amazing visuals - POV: it has been credited for its visuals, or it has been described as having "amazing visuals", but the current version implies that "its amazing visuals" are a fact
    •  Done? added fact tag
      • Oh, maybe I was unclear. It would be fine so long as you remove the word "amazing", leaving "It has been credited for its visuals" (that version would imply it has good visuals, without stating it as fact). Trebor 23:17, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
  • The game's most common criticism is its difficulty - cite, cite, cite - most common criticism is quite an ambitious thing to prove, but will at least need multiple sources
    •  Done added fact tag
  • Soundtrack needs expansion or could be merged into Development, two sentences does not a section make. Done

There's potential, but it needs a fair amount of work before getting near featured standard. Trebor 16:49, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]

All the easy stuff has been taken care of, and I added fact tags for future work.--Clyde (talk) 23:13, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Good work, I'll give it another run through tomorrow :) Trebor 23:17, 15 January 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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