Wikipedia:Peer review/Guatemalan Party of Labour/archive1

Article has been expanded significantly, but still needs improvement. --Soman 11:41, 21 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

WP:LEAD should be expanded to be a brief overview of the entire article.
Comma use has to reach a concensus- per WP:MOSDATE, the article should either have dates that either all have commas or that don't. (On February 2, 1952 vs On August 2 1953). Note also that the year should be linked if the full date is provided.
The external links that are in the article need to be converted into WP:FOOTNOTEs, and citation information has to be added about them.
The article skips around from years and jumping back into the past (1952 -> 1945, 1949-> 1922, etc.), and should be chronologized.
Watch out for captalization errors ("However, Although communism")
Needs copyediting, with examples like:
- On May 29 1978 the a massacre occurred in Panzós.
- A CIA intelligence estimate in 1952 reported that the PGT had a membership of about five hundred and an undetermined number of sympathizers. (makes it sound that the membership was composed of "five hundred and an undetermined number" of sympathizers)
- Meanwhile, the relation of the party towards the armed struggle was not uncomplicated. (complicated will suffice)
- highlightened differences (highlighted)

Thanks, AndyZ 21:04, 21 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Currently, this article's biggest problems are a lack of a "References" section and a lack of proper footnoting. --maclean25 22:24, 22 March 2006 (UTC)[reply]