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John Steinbeck[edit]

I am attempting to get the article to GA status and I know it has many faults. I am looking for editors to review and list the articles faults - places where improvements, references etc are needed. I am also looking for input on areas of the article that might need expanding and any other information that would help me edit the article to GA.

Many thanks, LordHarris 12:24, 3 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Awadewit[edit]

Two quick comments. You need to dig in and do the research. I noticed that almost all of your references are from the internet. The best work on Steinbeck is going to be in print - you need to find good Steinbeck biographies written by Steinbeck scholars as well as literary criticism on his works by scholars. Second, the section on Steinbeck's works needs to be greatly expanded - Steinbeck is notable because he is a writer - readers will want to know about his writings! Check out some of the FAs on writers like Balzac and Mary Wollstonecraft to get a sense of what is possible. Awadewit | talk 22:38, 3 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

I've ordered two biographies which should be with me next week. I will use them as much to expand per your comments. LordHarris 21:22, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Excellent! I look forward to reading revised version in a few weeks or months! Awadewit | talk 23:44, 4 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Quick comment: There are a lot of instances of really short or single-sentence paragraphs. Try combining some of them together to make the writing stronger. The subsection on Death, for example, could probably be a single paragraph, possibly two. I try to aim for three sentences in each 'graph. As far as references, I agree that you need more, but also consider what you already have. I don't believe IMDB is a reliable source for a biographical article. For web sources, you should have more than just the year they were accessed. I'll try to drop by again in the next day or two with more suggestions. Glad to see someone working on an article on such a great important American author! --Midnightdreary 04:08, 5 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]