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Justin Tuck

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've been putting in some serious elbow grease in improving this article. I'd like to improve it and hopefully make it a GA.

Thanks, Endless Dan 13:16, 3 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Hey Dan, some comments which may help on your quest for GA.

• Expand the lead. You currently have one very short para about him and then another single-sentence paragraph which isn't about him at all. Check out WP:LEAD to see what should go in there.Done
• The image caption is a fragment so it doesn't need a full stop.Done
• "(2005-present)" in the infobox should use the en-dash to separate the dates, so it'll end up being 2005–present.Done
• "His cousin Adalius Thomas plays for the New England Patriots.[2][3][4]" shouldn't be in the lead and why does it need three refs?

All those refs are also used for different statements found in the article so I figured it would do no harm to source it more then once. Smoke em if ya got em.

• Lots of American football jargon in the "Central Coosa County High" section. Need to explain or wikilink. Done
• Numbers below 10 should be written out in words. Done
• Move references to the right place per WP:CITE, e.g. [6] is just before a comma when it should be just after the comma. Done
• Giants season sections are really short. Either expand or merge. Done

Tried to satisfy this the best I can. He is a back-up player and was injured for a third of his career. I merged 05 & 06 and expanding the 07 section the best I can. I hope this is okay.

• Don't put spaces between punctuation and citations! Done - I believe I got em all.
• Personal Life section should be Personal life (lower case L) Done and should be prose, not bullet point trivia list. Done

I added most of the personal life section to the opener and to the Super Bowl sections.

Hope that helps. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:45, 7 April 2008 (UTC)