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Katniss Everdeen

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I'm hoping to bring this article up to GA. So far, I've reorganized the article's sections to something slightly unorthodox, to my understanding; broken up and copyedited (somewhat) the plot summary; and done a little bit of expansion work into the conception of Katniss' character.

I feel that the plot may be too long, and I am unsure as to if substantial amounts of uncited plot are allowable (they seemed to be when I was working on film articles). I changed the status of Primrose Everdeen (Katniss' sister) to deceased, as she was by the end of the trilogy, but I do not know if I should write as if this as if it were from before the books' plots began, or afterwards, as I thought. If there is something on your mind, feel free to express it. I am not familiar with working on articles such as these, and any assistance in turning me in the right direction would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks, --Starstriker7^(Talk) 08:06, 25 November 2011 (UTC)

Comments from Glimmer721

• See this for some automated tips; fix the contractions.
• One disambig link: [1]
• Prim's status as "deceased sister" should probably be removed as she died in the last book and was not dead to begin with. I would include a note which says that she dies in Mockingjay. On the subject of notes, I would also add one for Peeta's status as "husband" and say this is from the epilogue of Mockingjay.
• The "Names" section is mostly OR as it is missing refs (unless you can find more); I would remove it and just keep the info from this article and say "Concerning her name, Elizabeth Baird Hardy said that..." etc. Though the ref is a blog, I consider it reliable as Hardy works with John Granger who has written academic analyses of Harry Potter (I have one of his books) and so this is the same website and in the same vein as those books.
• I would just generally cut down on the "Appearences"...Mockingjay is in particular too long.
• The "Characterization" section contains mostly OR; only things directly from the book, the author, or reviewers should be cited. You could even say which reviewer said what (like this contains a lot about her personality). Also, there's quite a bit Collins has said about Katniss's symbolic resemblence to the Mockingjay.
• The "Possessions" section is irrelevent and should either be merged with "Background" or the appropriate book subsection.
• Reception is good, but it can always be added to, especially with reviews from Catching Fire. Is there anything negative a reviewer has said?
• The film of Catching Fire is due to come out in 2013...has Lawrence been confirmed for it?
• Be aware of overlinking.
• This is a fansite.