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This article has shown great improvements over the last couple of months and seems to be well received by many readers. I would simply like to have some suggestions as to what the article needs to become even better. Thank you. Best Regards, Signaturebrendel 00:17, 8 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

You want it, you get it. Here's my after-a-sleepless-night take on the article.

  • First and foremost, IMHO the article is really nicely structured, well written and much closer than further from the ideal. I really appreciate the way the sections are formatted to match templates, or the other way around.

Nitpicking:

  • Summary - in general, it is a very good summary, but the third sentence should be substantiated with some (easy to find, I believe) references.
  • The following ones are on the border of POV and "my aunt Mabel thinks it is better than sex, but my counsin Alfrieda believes it ranks between BMW 7 and apple mousse". There is a version somewhere in history that formulates this notion much better and more concisely. If you believe this matter really should be discussed more thoroughly in the article, I think a section might be appropriate, but not the summary. The Cx thing is substantial and should certainly stay and be more highlited.
  • I believe a reference for the "initally intended to be introduced as a standalone model for Lexus" sentence might come in handy.
  • The very last sentence in the UF20 IV section should IMHO be put into perspective for its significance to be understood by the general public.
  • In the same section, the transmission is referred to as "smooth" - bordering POV, I believe.
  • UF 30 I:
    • A bit of editorial attention might be advisable. The exterior and interior changes are mentioned in the first sentence, but the detailed description of them is relegate to the second paragraph. I suggest grouping the first sentence and the second paragraph into one paragraph, and the suspension/engine into other.
    • The interior volume claim might use a reference.
    • Dynamic Laser Cruise Control should better be explained, or at least Wikilinked.
  • Engine specs - the "number of gears" line makes it more appropriate to name it "Powertrain specs" or "Drivelines". Noting that all transmissions are automatic, and all generations have FR setup, as well as a more detailed description of the engines (bore/stroke, comp. ratio). I know this type of table is usually used in such articles, but I find it moderately visually attractive.
  • The "Future possibilities" section is more like a "gossip and commentary" one. The second paragraph would suffice. The reference site only briefly mentions the V12 possibility, nothing on the Century there.
  • The J.D. Power achievement in trivia is no trivia, it's a very significant achievement and belongs in the summary, IMHO.

What I believe could be added to make the article more comprehensive:

  • LS's status in most important market (sales vs. important rivals) - which means USA, Europe and Japan (if you can find any data on the latter). The difference between mainstream success in America and relative insignificance in Europe should be highlited IMHO. Sales results/ownership comparisons with competitors, perhaps?
  • The role in shifting perceptions and market positions of Japanese vs. American and European brands is worth noting
  • Perhaps you might find some sources that would enable you to say what distinguishes LS owners, if anything?
  • Does LS have any role in popular culture?
  • Some insight into the development history would be interesting.

Having said that, I must add that this article is very good and enjoyable to read, as well as very informative and useful for a casual Wikipedia user like myself :D I wish I would write one like that myself. --Bravada 05:08, 18 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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