Wikipedia:Peer review/Lung cancer/archive1
Lung cancer[edit]
This article is mature now, and complies with Wikipedia:Manual of Style (medicine-related articles). It is already a "Good article". I hope that it will soon be "Featured article" quality. Thanks. Axl 07:41, 1 August 2007 (UTC)
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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Davnel03 12:05, 1 August 2007 (UTC)
From SandyGeorgia[edit]
Nice compliance with MEDMOS! There are some issues with WP:MOS though:
- Review WP:MOSBOLD and WP:ITALICS (I saw an italicized list).
- I fixed the footnote placement
- History should be expanded, and the lead should come more into line with WP:LEAD (Tuberculosis would be a good sample article).
- The article is a bit list-heavy and prose short.
- Templates like {{main}} and {{seealso}} go at the top of sections
Very fine start, but the content could be beefed up. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:01, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks for the feedback. I'm working on it. Axl 09:49, 4 August 2007 (UTC)
- The footnotes can use more work. The empty paramters in the cite templates can add as much as 5KB (unnecessarily) to the article size, and make it harder to edit the article. You aren't using the URL and PMID parameters correctly in the cite templates; URL should be used for links to full-text versions of the journal reports, while the pmid parameter links to abstracts only. Make sure all publishers are specified on websources. There's a pmid filler in the userbox on my user page; you supply a PMID and it generate the entire cite template for you. The lead still seems short (see WP:LEAD, it should be a compelling, stand-alone summary), and perhaps you can get more feedback from the Medicine projects on how to beef up the content. Compare to Influenza, Tuberculosis and Coeliac disease. Great progress so far ! SandyGeorgia (Talk) 20:54, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
- You can ask Brighterorange (talk · contribs) to run his script to fix the dashes in your article per WP:DASH. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 21:02, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
- The footnotes can use more work. The empty paramters in the cite templates can add as much as 5KB (unnecessarily) to the article size, and make it harder to edit the article. You aren't using the URL and PMID parameters correctly in the cite templates; URL should be used for links to full-text versions of the journal reports, while the pmid parameter links to abstracts only. Make sure all publishers are specified on websources. There's a pmid filler in the userbox on my user page; you supply a PMID and it generate the entire cite template for you. The lead still seems short (see WP:LEAD, it should be a compelling, stand-alone summary), and perhaps you can get more feedback from the Medicine projects on how to beef up the content. Compare to Influenza, Tuberculosis and Coeliac disease. Great progress so far ! SandyGeorgia (Talk) 20:54, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
- Okay, thanks. Axl 07:11, 10 August 2007 (UTC)