Wikipedia:Peer review/Mechanical biological treatment/archive1
Mechanical biological treatment[edit]
I would appreciate your thoughts on the above article I created some time ago on an alternative and emerging form of waste treatment. --Alex 13:50, 21 November 2006 (UTC)
My take:
- It's a decent article.
- Try to find a picture for a plant of an MBT for the righthand top corner.
- Your usage of "MBT" should be replaced with the name in full. It's redundant and confusing.
- Please use the template for see also (Template: see also). It's more professional.
- I've fixed this for you.
- Titling your sections as "______ element" sounds like how to build one. Please just make it one big section called "process." The way you broke it up will confuse readers to think that they are two different processes. They aren't, they're the 2 steps. If you must, make them sub-sections respectively entitled: "_______ factor." This will clarify that they are steps.
- Again, no "MBT" abbreviation.
- Retitle the "MBT and kerbside collection" to "Affect on kerbside collection"
- Get and place in the "MBT and kerbside collection" section the exact quote from friends of the earth.
- You've got me with the Friends of the Earth section. It really needs to be retitled, I can't think of anything. Or it should be combined with the lead. This would be okay because it would add notability to the subject.
- "MBT process examples"-- you've got to be kidding me with this title. You title it examples and the first thing you do is talk about variant technologies? Change it to "Water-based MBT treatment." The 'MBT' is okay here because without abbreviating it [the title] would be too long.
- Could you make a process chart, ie, one with arrows showing the individual steps. It would be very helpful for the water MBT section.
- Major problem: in-line citations.
- These go after periods with no space in between the period and citation but one between the citation and the next sentence.
- The citations go after quotes.
- You have 8. Not enough. Get more. Use books. I'm sure you could skim through a few at google books.
Sorry if I've given this article a hard time. Well, at least you won't face these problems when you are going through FAC, which is signifigantly far away for this article.
Evan(Salad dressing is the milk of the infidel!) 22:38, 21 November 2006 (UTC)