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Project Apollo[edit]

Looking for general advice to get article to a featured status. --GW_SimulationsTalk | Contribs | E-mail 13:34, 13 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

  • My comments:
    • The introduction should be expanded to somewhere between 2-4 paragraphs (see WP:LEAD).
    • Headings should generally avoid repeating the article title (for example, the heading Reasons for Apollo should be changed to simply Reasons)
    • Miscellaneous information should be incorporated into the rest of the article and removed; trivia sections generally are looked down upon.
    • Inline citations are needed. Generally, these are done in the form of WP:FOOTNOTEs.
    • Please alphabetize the categories and interwiki links.
    • As of now, the article is too list-heavy. I would suggest that at least some of the lists be prosified (converted to paragraph form) if possible.
  • Thanks, AndyZ t 13:58, 13 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
      • I have changed headings and moved the list of capsule locations to the page about the Apollo spacecraft. I will implement the rest later. In reference to the comment on category order, wouldn't chronological order be better? --GW_SimulationsTalk | Contribs | E-mail 18:07, 15 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Just a few comments:
  • The "Reasons" section seems out of context. Only the first, brief paragraph discusses the reason behind the program. The other two are post-program reflections rather than initial motivation. Perhaps that section should be merged with the others, or else renamed?
  • "equiptment".
  • I agree that there are a lot of lists. The launch lists could be converted into nicely-formatted tables.
  • There are some odd gaps between the paragraphs that don't really add anything and make the page look unfinished. They should be eliminated.
  • George Low should be linked.
  • Perhaps you could explain somewhere why there were no launches named "Apollo 2" or "Apollo 3"?
  • The long paragraph in the "Manned missions" needs to be broken into 2-3 shorter paragraphs to make it easier to read.
  • At the end could you include some comments about where the capsules are on display? Or are being stored? Or were destroyed?
I hope these comments were somewhat helpful. Thanks! — RJH 16:25, 22 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Reasons section merged with background and end of program sections, and I've had a look at the spacing. I am researching Apollo 2, and as for capsule locations, this is handled in the Apollo Spacecraft article, as it refers to the spacecraft as opposed to the whole program. Thanks, GW_SimulationsTalk | Contribs | E-mail 21:33, 23 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It looks nice, you might try something with the cancelled mission section, even just a few words as to why they were canceled, instead of mearely their names. That might be better than their names, in fact. Tuvas 23:24, 26 May 2006 (UTC)[reply]

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