Wikipedia:Peer review/Rachel Corrie/archive1

Rachel Corrie

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I've listed this article for peer review because I think the article has potential to meet GA standard. However, I think there are flaws in it, and I'd like a review by an editor.

Thanks, Wehwalt (talk) 11:06, 28 April 2008 (UTC)

Review by Wackymacs

Overall, this looks like its on its way to being GA soon.

• Expand the lead to 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
• Early Life section is too short - consider expanding, or merge with another section.
• "Corrie's death sparked controversy and led to international media coverage, in part because she was an American, and in part because of the highly politicized nature of the conflict itself." - There is no reference for this statement.
• " Capt. Jacob Dallal, a spokesman for the Israeli army, called Corrie's death a "regrettable accident" and said that she and the other ISM activists were "a group of protesters who were acting very irresponsibly, putting everyone in danger — the Palestinians, themselves and our forces — by intentionally placing themselves in a combat zone. " - Again, missing a reference.
• Consider reorganizing the section "Artistic tributes" - the paragraphs are short and the flow isn't very good.
• Please format all references properly (with publication dates, publisher name, author info, and access date). Please see Wikipedia:Citing sources and Wikipedia:Citation templates.
• Please get a copy-editor to go through the text. See Wikipedia:Peer_review/volunteers#General_copyediting for a list of people who may be able to help you.
• Please see User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a for advice on satisfying GA Criteria 1, which concerns the prose quality.
• It is vital you pay attention to Wikipedia:Good article criteria if you want this to become a Good Article.

Hope my comments are helpful. — Wackymacs (talk) 14:26, 1 May 2008 (UTC)