Wikipedia:Peer review/Samsun/archive1

Samsun

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I've listed this article for peer review because…

I am not sure what it needs

Thanks, Jzlcdh (talk) 18:29, 14 June 2012 (UTC)

Comments by Dana Boomer

I'm not sure where you're planning to head with this article (GA? FA? Just improving it?), but there is quite a bit of room for improvement. Here are some specific thoughts:

• Lead should be expanded. Per WP:LEAD, two paragraphs should be about right for an article of this length.
• There are a lot of one and two sentence paragraphs, which make the article feel very choppy. Quite a few of these should be either expanded or combined with other paragraphs.
• Referencing should be improved. There are quite a few spots missing references (entire sections go without references), plus two citation needed tags and one better source needed tag.
• Web references should include a title, publisher and access date at the very least, plus author, publication date and other info if applicable.
• Telephone numbers, visiting hours and directions to various places are inappropriate - this is an encyclopedia, not a tourist guide.
• There are quite a few sections that I would expect to see in a city article that aren't here. Where is the information on demographics, governance, arts and culture, media?
• Has nothing happened in the city since 1919? The history section overall could stand to see some expansion.
• Places to see needs to be re-written to avoid sounding like a tourist guide. I think this section could easily be presented as prose, instead of a bulleted list, with items grouped in paragraphs by theme (religious places, historical places, etc), and some context to show why these are the places to see in Samsun.

Despite the above, the article is a good start on the topic. Thank you for your work on it so far, and please let me know if you have any questions, Dana boomer (talk) 14:44, 22 June 2012 (UTC)