Wikipedia:Peer review/Tan Malaka/archive1

Tan Malaka[edit]

I'm rather fond of this article about an interesting figure in Indonesian anti-colonial history. I'll be interested in suggestions - any parts that need more (or less) context in order to be understandable? Suggestions for improving the prose? Thanks! CDC (talk) 23:44, 18 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

It is a good article. Some potential points of improvement could include:
- making the narrative details more balanced in terms of level of detail. Many of the early sections are very broad in scope while some of the middle sections give details of the subject's experiences.
- A couple more images would be nice.
- More context of his autobiography would be good, like how it has been interpreted and used by scholars or how long it took him to write.
- "the death toll from sickness and starvation was very high." might need a reference.
- To make the headings parallel switch "From Jail to Jail" to "Autobiography"...so it goes "Biography", "Political beliefs", "Autobiography" . --maclean25 22:07, 23 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your suggestions! They're much appreciated, especially the note about the uneven levels of detail; a similar thing had occurred to me, so if someone else noticed it, maybe I should fix that.. Images are tough - there's just not much out there. I've been considering a map giving an overview of the key locations of his life, as a way of illustrating his wanderings. CDC (talk) 23:09, 24 January 2006 (UTC)[reply]