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Tenacious D

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has been GA for a while, and I feel that a bit of an injection of new blood could kick it into FA.

Thanks, Tenacious D Fan (talk) 17:53, 27 February 2008 (UTC)

Ruhrfisch comments: I learned a lot about the band and enjoyed this article. It nees some polish to get to FA. I am not sure this really needs a peer review as much as just looking at the previous FAC comments and taking them seriously, but here goes:

• Since the article has been through FAC four times, I would go through all of those comments as carefully as possible as make sure they had all been addressed. I would also treat the comments as examples and look for similar problems throughout the article. Examples of unaddressed issues from FACs:
  • Still lots of very short (one or two sentence) paragraphs and choppy writing.
  • Why did Gass initially feel threatened by Black?
  • Per WP:LEAD, all material in the lead should be in the article: the lead still says they formed the group in LA in 1994, the article does not say this explicitly.
• I would also be very careful to only include material on Tenacious D in the article, currently there is a fair amount of stuff on the solo work of the two members that just does not belong here. Two examples, one OK, one not: Mentioning Jack Black's involvement in King Kong interfering with Tenacious D's plans / work is fine; Black has starred in a number of films himself including High Fidelity, School of Rock... is not. I think even here it would be OK to say that they had each appeared in films, some together, but keep the focus of the article on Tenacious D. Another example - Gass and Black's solo appearances in other group's music videos have nothing to do with the band.
• Some things make no sense.
  • For example: Black and Gass, at the time respectively aged 16 and 24, met in Edinburgh, Scotland during the Edinburgh Fringe. Both were members of the Los Angeles-based theatre troupe, The Actors' Gang[5][6] which was performing Tim Robbins' play Carnage.[7] So they met in Edinburgh, but they were already in an LA theatre troupe? Which is it? Also, when did they meet (year and month)? Put things into context - how long after they met did they form the group?
  • Another example: The soundtrack was released just over a week earlier, on November 14, and reached number eight on the Billboard 200 in the U.S.,[33] number twenty-four in the UK,[34] and number fifty-seven in the US.[35] Did the album reach #8 or #57 in the US? If these are different charts, clarify.
• There is some repetition of material. Since they have only made two albums and an EP (with 4 singles) and the albums, EP and most of the singles are already discussed above, having a separate discography section seems silly - just link to their discography list under See also.
• Ref 63 (City Hall Lyrics) does not list full information (publisher, date accessed, etc.). I also am not sure this meets WP:RS.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 19:10, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Good point about the charts. I have fixed the discog page so I'll link to that. Tenacious D Fan (talk) 15:11, 19 March 2008 (UTC)

I can see how that error crept in. I think someone mistook the single POD for the album Pick of Destiny. That's sorted. Tenacious D Fan (talk) 15:13, 19 March 2008 (UTC)